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Hi, I'm Music2611, I'll be conducting this GA review, the article looks quite good at first sight.
Lead
- The main image needs Alt text
- Why do you put the airdate info here and not in the reception section?
- Added and sourced. The Flash {talk} 23:26, 19 October 2009 (UTC)
- Quotations should be cited.
Plot
- This might be nitpicky, but you seem to overuse the word "fit". Try using "get in shape" once in a while.
Production
- The Seth Rogen image needs Alt text
- No further issues here. Great work!
Reception
- Again with the date thing.
- Added and sourced. The Flash {talk} 23:27, 19 October 2009 (UTC)
- There's a mention of a cameo by Matt Groening, there should be mention of it in the production section, as it seems quite notable.
- You jump from past to present tense: "...commented that the first act of the episode is the strongest..." for instance. Please change everything to present tense.
- Done (I think). The leftorium 20:43, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
- In the final sentence, change I to [he].
Other issues
- Any info regarding Kevin Michael Richardson's appearance as a security guard?
- Not that I know of - Lefty or Scorpion might know. The Flash {talk} 23:38, 19 October 2009 (UTC)
- The AV refrences covers Richerdsons and Groeing's apperences.--
Pedro J.
the rookie
00:22, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
- I ment could you put that in the production section, along with the info you have on Groening's cameo. Something like: "Show creator Matt Groening made a cameo appearance in the episode, appearing (scene he appears in). Keving Michael Richardson voiced a security guard."-- Music 26/ 11 09:58, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
- I added Groening's cameo to the production section, but not Richardson's because I couldn't find a source for it. The leftorium 20:43, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
The AV club covers that one says taht richerdson appered in every episode.-- Pedro J. the rookie 20:50, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
- No, he says "Also, my DVR cut off a lot of the closing credits tonight because it’s stupid, but was Kevin Michael Richardson in all four shows?" That is too vague. The leftorium 20:51, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
- Why does the AV Club ref says The AV Club is published by VanDerWerff?
- Wondered that myself - fixed. The Flash {talk} 23:27, 19 October 2009 (UTC)
That's all I'll put this article on hold for a week until the issues have been resolved. I believe the article has some potential for FAC, though it needs some more polishing. Also, feel free to review my FAC " The Revenge", which is currently running very low on reviewers. Cheerio.-- Music 26/ 11 21:24, 19 October 2009 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review! :) The leftorium 20:43, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
Pass this article has passed its GA review. I'll take care of the loose ends later, I have to go right now.-- Music 26/ 11 11:30, 21 October 2009 (UTC)
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Hi, I'm Music2611, I'll be conducting this GA review, the article looks quite good at first sight.
Lead
- The main image needs Alt text
- Why do you put the airdate info here and not in the reception section?
- Added and sourced. The Flash {talk} 23:26, 19 October 2009 (UTC)
- Quotations should be cited.
Plot
- This might be nitpicky, but you seem to overuse the word "fit". Try using "get in shape" once in a while.
Production
- The Seth Rogen image needs Alt text
- No further issues here. Great work!
Reception
- Again with the date thing.
- Added and sourced. The Flash {talk} 23:27, 19 October 2009 (UTC)
- There's a mention of a cameo by Matt Groening, there should be mention of it in the production section, as it seems quite notable.
- You jump from past to present tense: "...commented that the first act of the episode is the strongest..." for instance. Please change everything to present tense.
- Done (I think). The leftorium 20:43, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
- In the final sentence, change I to [he].
Other issues
- Any info regarding Kevin Michael Richardson's appearance as a security guard?
- Not that I know of - Lefty or Scorpion might know. The Flash {talk} 23:38, 19 October 2009 (UTC)
- The AV refrences covers Richerdsons and Groeing's apperences.--
Pedro J.
the rookie
00:22, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
- I ment could you put that in the production section, along with the info you have on Groening's cameo. Something like: "Show creator Matt Groening made a cameo appearance in the episode, appearing (scene he appears in). Keving Michael Richardson voiced a security guard."-- Music 26/ 11 09:58, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
- I added Groening's cameo to the production section, but not Richardson's because I couldn't find a source for it. The leftorium 20:43, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
The AV club covers that one says taht richerdson appered in every episode.-- Pedro J. the rookie 20:50, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
- No, he says "Also, my DVR cut off a lot of the closing credits tonight because it’s stupid, but was Kevin Michael Richardson in all four shows?" That is too vague. The leftorium 20:51, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
- Why does the AV Club ref says The AV Club is published by VanDerWerff?
- Wondered that myself - fixed. The Flash {talk} 23:27, 19 October 2009 (UTC)
That's all I'll put this article on hold for a week until the issues have been resolved. I believe the article has some potential for FAC, though it needs some more polishing. Also, feel free to review my FAC " The Revenge", which is currently running very low on reviewers. Cheerio.-- Music 26/ 11 21:24, 19 October 2009 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review! :) The leftorium 20:43, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
Pass this article has passed its GA review. I'll take care of the loose ends later, I have to go right now.-- Music 26/ 11 11:30, 21 October 2009 (UTC)