In the Post-war period section, it would be best if "Stanley Cup" were linked once, per
here. In the Detroit Red Wings section, I doubt that Gordie Howe "played" hockey with Massachusetts senator Ted Kennedy; the link might have to be fixed. In the Expansion section, it would be best if "Los Angeles", "San Francisco", and "St. Louis" were linked once.
Fixed all. In the latter case, the double links to LA, SF and St.L pointed to different articles. I removed all of the city links from the first set for simplicty and to reduce confusion.
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
Does Reference 7 cover all this ---> "At Dutton's request, he was replaced by Clarence Campbell. Campbell served as the NHL's third president from 1946 until his retirement in 1977. The stability Campbell offered as president was matched by that of the league itself. The NHL remained fixed at the same six teams for the first 21 years of his presidency, until the 1967 NHL Expansion"? Does Reference 20 cover all this ---> "The fans leaving the Forum were met by a mob of angry demonstrators outside. The mob grew to 10,000 people, overwhelming the 250 police officers on the scene, and rioted outside of the Forum. Order was not restored until 3 a.m. Seventy people were arrested, 37 people injured, 50 stores were looted and $100,000 in property damage was reported in the violence, which became known as l'affair Richard, or the Richard Riot"?
In both cases, yes. The Pincus book (The Illustrated History of the NHL) has several profiles of people and events. The two listed cites are to such profiles, of Clarence Campbell and the Richard Riot, respectively.
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
In the lead, this ---> "one of the greatest players of all time", sounds like POV.
Removed. That was added by another editor, and I understand what they were trying to do. I plan on expanding the descriptions of players such as Howe before trying for FA. This will address that editor's concern as well, I hope.
In the Post-war period section, it would be best if "Stanley Cup" were linked once, per
here. In the Detroit Red Wings section, I doubt that Gordie Howe "played" hockey with Massachusetts senator Ted Kennedy; the link might have to be fixed. In the Expansion section, it would be best if "Los Angeles", "San Francisco", and "St. Louis" were linked once.
Fixed all. In the latter case, the double links to LA, SF and St.L pointed to different articles. I removed all of the city links from the first set for simplicty and to reduce confusion.
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
Does Reference 7 cover all this ---> "At Dutton's request, he was replaced by Clarence Campbell. Campbell served as the NHL's third president from 1946 until his retirement in 1977. The stability Campbell offered as president was matched by that of the league itself. The NHL remained fixed at the same six teams for the first 21 years of his presidency, until the 1967 NHL Expansion"? Does Reference 20 cover all this ---> "The fans leaving the Forum were met by a mob of angry demonstrators outside. The mob grew to 10,000 people, overwhelming the 250 police officers on the scene, and rioted outside of the Forum. Order was not restored until 3 a.m. Seventy people were arrested, 37 people injured, 50 stores were looted and $100,000 in property damage was reported in the violence, which became known as l'affair Richard, or the Richard Riot"?
In both cases, yes. The Pincus book (The Illustrated History of the NHL) has several profiles of people and events. The two listed cites are to such profiles, of Clarence Campbell and the Richard Riot, respectively.
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
In the lead, this ---> "one of the greatest players of all time", sounds like POV.
Removed. That was added by another editor, and I understand what they were trying to do. I plan on expanding the descriptions of players such as Howe before trying for FA. This will address that editor's concern as well, I hope.