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My preferred way of working on a WP:GAN is to do an initial review to see whether an article should be quick failed and then, usually, do an initial review (leaving the WP:lead until last) followed up by a more detailed review. However in this case I'm going to put the article On Hold directly as I consider it to have a flaw that needs to be addressed before the review can continue.
This article has very much the makings of a WP:GA, as the article appears to be adequately referenced and well illustrated, however I think the article does not provide an adequate description of the History of Bombay to readers unfamiliar with Bombay.
The problem starts in the WP:lead, with the lead being written (logically) from a present-day perspective, i.e.: "In place of the present day city was an archipelago of seven islands". It is also copied into the Accession of Bombay to the Portuguese section and more confusing information is given, i.e. "In place of the present day city was an archipelago of seven islands: Bombay Island (Bombaim), Parel, Mazagaon, Mahim, Colaba, Worli, and Old Woman's Island (also known as Little Colaba).[1] The Salsette group of islands were located east of Bombay, separated by the Mahim Bay.[2] Important strategic towns located near Bombay were; Bassein (Baçaim) to the north, Thane to the east, and Chaul to the south." No further details are given; and this lack of information is a fatal flaw. Looking at the Seven islands of Bombay article gives a helpful map, i.e.
and looking at Mumbai gives another map, i.e.
It becomes fairly obvious that land has been recovered, but this article fails to adequately describe whether any of this land recovery was taking place during the scope of this article; neither does it provide any diagram to clarify the confusion caused by inadequate description of the areas under consideration. Pyrotec ( talk) 19:56, 31 May 2009
Bombay can mean 4 different areas....
Thanks. Your recent edits to the article have considerably clarified the situation, so I will continue with the assessment. Pyrotec ( talk) 11:20, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
Not noticing that the article is actually currently being reviewed for GA, I have conducted a peer review at WP:Peer_review/History_of_Bombay_under_Portuguese_rule_(1534-1661)/archive1, which may provide further pointers. Jezhotwells ( talk) 01:53, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
This article is basically at GA-level.
Pyrotec ( talk) 19:54, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
A wide ranging article.
Congratulations on the article, I'm awarding GA-status. Pyrotec ( talk) 13:02, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
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My preferred way of working on a WP:GAN is to do an initial review to see whether an article should be quick failed and then, usually, do an initial review (leaving the WP:lead until last) followed up by a more detailed review. However in this case I'm going to put the article On Hold directly as I consider it to have a flaw that needs to be addressed before the review can continue.
This article has very much the makings of a WP:GA, as the article appears to be adequately referenced and well illustrated, however I think the article does not provide an adequate description of the History of Bombay to readers unfamiliar with Bombay.
The problem starts in the WP:lead, with the lead being written (logically) from a present-day perspective, i.e.: "In place of the present day city was an archipelago of seven islands". It is also copied into the Accession of Bombay to the Portuguese section and more confusing information is given, i.e. "In place of the present day city was an archipelago of seven islands: Bombay Island (Bombaim), Parel, Mazagaon, Mahim, Colaba, Worli, and Old Woman's Island (also known as Little Colaba).[1] The Salsette group of islands were located east of Bombay, separated by the Mahim Bay.[2] Important strategic towns located near Bombay were; Bassein (Baçaim) to the north, Thane to the east, and Chaul to the south." No further details are given; and this lack of information is a fatal flaw. Looking at the Seven islands of Bombay article gives a helpful map, i.e.
and looking at Mumbai gives another map, i.e.
It becomes fairly obvious that land has been recovered, but this article fails to adequately describe whether any of this land recovery was taking place during the scope of this article; neither does it provide any diagram to clarify the confusion caused by inadequate description of the areas under consideration. Pyrotec ( talk) 19:56, 31 May 2009
Bombay can mean 4 different areas....
Thanks. Your recent edits to the article have considerably clarified the situation, so I will continue with the assessment. Pyrotec ( talk) 11:20, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
Not noticing that the article is actually currently being reviewed for GA, I have conducted a peer review at WP:Peer_review/History_of_Bombay_under_Portuguese_rule_(1534-1661)/archive1, which may provide further pointers. Jezhotwells ( talk) 01:53, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
This article is basically at GA-level.
Pyrotec ( talk) 19:54, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
A wide ranging article.
Congratulations on the article, I'm awarding GA-status. Pyrotec ( talk) 13:02, 3 June 2009 (UTC)