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Hi. I just read the area in the USA is "heavily Jewish neighborhood of Highland Park". I don't live in the USA. But if the area is a Jewish area then it should be mentioned. [1] — Preceding unsigned comment added by 86.15.202.168 ( talk) 15:22, 6 July 2022 (UTC)
So I'm wondering what was the motive behind that attack or is there even one? 2601:49:8400:20F0:C5FA:965F:9246:44BF ( talk) 23:48, 17 November 2022 (UTC)
I have a couple of questions i can't quite work out the answers to, relating to the writing and meaning in a three places in the article. I'm hoping that someone who knows the answers ~ maybe even one of the editors who wrote the prose i'm querying ~ can clarify, both here for me and in the article for our readers.
He then drove to the Madison, Wisconsin area, with a Kel-Tec SUB-2000 semiautomatic rifle in his car. He considered attacking another Independence Day celebration in Madison, but decided against it....It was later suspected that after fleeing the scene Crimo borrowed his mother's car and drove to Madison, Wisconsin where he briefly contemplated a second attack.Does the third sentence here not repeat, in slightly simpler language, the first two? If so, why? Sure, it has a different reference, but couldn't we simply add that to those for the other sentences?
Three Jewish victims that were killed were a 63-year-old woman, an 88-year-old grandfather, and a 35-year-old woman. Another was a 64-year-old mother of two.Another what? Victim? Jewish victim? If the latter, why not combine the two sentences and start with "Four" instead of "Three"? If the former, we've now identified by age and gender six of the victims, why are we coy about the seventh? Either way, this reads roughly and without the clarity we aim for.
He told the New York Post the day after the shooting that his son talked about the 2022 Copenhagen mall shooting and the 22-year-old Danish suspect the night before allegedly launching his own massacre, and avoided taking any responsibility or feeling guilt over how the suspect got his gun.As this reads, the son talked about the Copenhagen shooting and didn't take responsibility for how the Danish suspect obtained his weapon. I suspect that avoided is supposed to take the first word of the sentence, He as its subject, meaning that the father didn't take responsibility for the son's getting his gun, but it is, at the very least, a strain to interpret it that way and asks the comma between massacre and and avoided to do more than such a small punctuation mark should.
Thanks for any answers/help offered. Happy days, ~ Lindsay H ello 08:06, 18 December 2023 (UTC)
would it be worth adding the texas tower and las vegas strip shootings to the See also section? Someone added the waukesha parade attack and called them similar even tho they clearly arent. but texas tower and las vegas strip would be because they were both on high up places, like this one. Elizzaflanagan221 ( talk) 13:03, 11 January 2024 (UTC)
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Hi. I just read the area in the USA is "heavily Jewish neighborhood of Highland Park". I don't live in the USA. But if the area is a Jewish area then it should be mentioned. [1] — Preceding unsigned comment added by 86.15.202.168 ( talk) 15:22, 6 July 2022 (UTC)
So I'm wondering what was the motive behind that attack or is there even one? 2601:49:8400:20F0:C5FA:965F:9246:44BF ( talk) 23:48, 17 November 2022 (UTC)
I have a couple of questions i can't quite work out the answers to, relating to the writing and meaning in a three places in the article. I'm hoping that someone who knows the answers ~ maybe even one of the editors who wrote the prose i'm querying ~ can clarify, both here for me and in the article for our readers.
He then drove to the Madison, Wisconsin area, with a Kel-Tec SUB-2000 semiautomatic rifle in his car. He considered attacking another Independence Day celebration in Madison, but decided against it....It was later suspected that after fleeing the scene Crimo borrowed his mother's car and drove to Madison, Wisconsin where he briefly contemplated a second attack.Does the third sentence here not repeat, in slightly simpler language, the first two? If so, why? Sure, it has a different reference, but couldn't we simply add that to those for the other sentences?
Three Jewish victims that were killed were a 63-year-old woman, an 88-year-old grandfather, and a 35-year-old woman. Another was a 64-year-old mother of two.Another what? Victim? Jewish victim? If the latter, why not combine the two sentences and start with "Four" instead of "Three"? If the former, we've now identified by age and gender six of the victims, why are we coy about the seventh? Either way, this reads roughly and without the clarity we aim for.
He told the New York Post the day after the shooting that his son talked about the 2022 Copenhagen mall shooting and the 22-year-old Danish suspect the night before allegedly launching his own massacre, and avoided taking any responsibility or feeling guilt over how the suspect got his gun.As this reads, the son talked about the Copenhagen shooting and didn't take responsibility for how the Danish suspect obtained his weapon. I suspect that avoided is supposed to take the first word of the sentence, He as its subject, meaning that the father didn't take responsibility for the son's getting his gun, but it is, at the very least, a strain to interpret it that way and asks the comma between massacre and and avoided to do more than such a small punctuation mark should.
Thanks for any answers/help offered. Happy days, ~ Lindsay H ello 08:06, 18 December 2023 (UTC)
would it be worth adding the texas tower and las vegas strip shootings to the See also section? Someone added the waukesha parade attack and called them similar even tho they clearly arent. but texas tower and las vegas strip would be because they were both on high up places, like this one. Elizzaflanagan221 ( talk) 13:03, 11 January 2024 (UTC)