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Reviewer: RoySmith ( talk · contribs) 19:11, 2 November 2023 (UTC)
Starting review now. As a general comment, I've written an essay, WP:LANGCITE which I think would be valuable here. To be clear, the suggestions I make there are not WP:GACR, just my personal thoughts. RoySmith (talk) 19:11, 2 November 2023 (UTC)
Tanner completed secondary school...At this point, it's not clear if "Tanner" means Hermann Tanner or Simon Tanner. In a paragraph talking about multiple members of the same family, it works better to switch to using first names, so "Hermann completed secondary school...".
namely Latin, Ancient Greek..., delete "namely"
In 1901, Tanner helped his father... becoming its first managingWhat you mean to say is "Tanner became its first managing...", but there's so much distance between "Tanner" and "becoming", the subject-verb relationship has become unclear.
a serious, highly trained officer ...quote with {{ blockquote}} (as you do further down) will make it easier to read, although {{ Text and translation}} might be better.
according to historian Piotr Bednarz, I think this is pl:Piotr Bednarz (historyk), in which case add a cross-wiki link.
Tanner was for a period a friend of the mountain climber Christian Kluckermakes me wonder what happened to end the friendship. Maybe just drop "for a period"? Also, you don't need "the" before "mountain climber".
He was also a supported of the constructed language Occidental. I assume that's supposed to be "supporter"?
That's it for now. Overall, I think this is a very nice article and I don't see any reason I won't be able to approve it once you've made this last set of changes. RoySmith (talk) 01:17, 3 November 2023 (UTC)
The result was: promoted by
PrimalMustelid
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02:18, 30 December 2023 (UTC)
Auch Hermann Alfred Tanner (1873-1961), Pionier auf dem Gebiet der Farbennormierung, verbreitete Occidental unter den Rätoromanen [Also Hermann Alfred Tanner (1873-1961), Pioneer in the field of colour standardisation, spread Occidental among the Romansh]
Improved to Good Article status by Frzzl ( talk). Self-nominated at 23:08, 3 November 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Hermann Alfred Tanner; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.
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I think the hook needs work. Too much here is confusing and difficult to understand. Why is it relevant that he's a major? The average reader won't know what Romansch are and probably don't understand what a constructed language is either. Overall, I'm not sure that this hook is engaging and helpful for a main page audience. (
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buidhe
23:54, 3 November 2023 (UTC)
I already reviewed it. I'm still not convinced that the alternative hook is suitable but if someone else sees fit to approve it I won't interfere. (
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15:27, 18 November 2023 (UTC)
![]() | Hermann Alfred Tanner has been listed as one of the
Social sciences and society good articles under the
good article criteria. If you can improve it further,
please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can
reassess it. Review: November 3, 2023. ( Reviewed version). |
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![]() | A fact from Hermann Alfred Tanner appeared on Wikipedia's
Main Page in the
Did you know column on 9 January 2024 (
check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
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Reviewer: RoySmith ( talk · contribs) 19:11, 2 November 2023 (UTC)
Starting review now. As a general comment, I've written an essay, WP:LANGCITE which I think would be valuable here. To be clear, the suggestions I make there are not WP:GACR, just my personal thoughts. RoySmith (talk) 19:11, 2 November 2023 (UTC)
Tanner completed secondary school...At this point, it's not clear if "Tanner" means Hermann Tanner or Simon Tanner. In a paragraph talking about multiple members of the same family, it works better to switch to using first names, so "Hermann completed secondary school...".
namely Latin, Ancient Greek..., delete "namely"
In 1901, Tanner helped his father... becoming its first managingWhat you mean to say is "Tanner became its first managing...", but there's so much distance between "Tanner" and "becoming", the subject-verb relationship has become unclear.
a serious, highly trained officer ...quote with {{ blockquote}} (as you do further down) will make it easier to read, although {{ Text and translation}} might be better.
according to historian Piotr Bednarz, I think this is pl:Piotr Bednarz (historyk), in which case add a cross-wiki link.
Tanner was for a period a friend of the mountain climber Christian Kluckermakes me wonder what happened to end the friendship. Maybe just drop "for a period"? Also, you don't need "the" before "mountain climber".
He was also a supported of the constructed language Occidental. I assume that's supposed to be "supporter"?
That's it for now. Overall, I think this is a very nice article and I don't see any reason I won't be able to approve it once you've made this last set of changes. RoySmith (talk) 01:17, 3 November 2023 (UTC)
The result was: promoted by
PrimalMustelid
talk
02:18, 30 December 2023 (UTC)
Auch Hermann Alfred Tanner (1873-1961), Pionier auf dem Gebiet der Farbennormierung, verbreitete Occidental unter den Rätoromanen [Also Hermann Alfred Tanner (1873-1961), Pioneer in the field of colour standardisation, spread Occidental among the Romansh]
Improved to Good Article status by Frzzl ( talk). Self-nominated at 23:08, 3 November 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Hermann Alfred Tanner; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.
General: Article is new enough and long enough |
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Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems |
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Hook eligibility:
QPQ: Done. |
Overall:
I think the hook needs work. Too much here is confusing and difficult to understand. Why is it relevant that he's a major? The average reader won't know what Romansch are and probably don't understand what a constructed language is either. Overall, I'm not sure that this hook is engaging and helpful for a main page audience. (
t ·
c)
buidhe
23:54, 3 November 2023 (UTC)
I already reviewed it. I'm still not convinced that the alternative hook is suitable but if someone else sees fit to approve it I won't interfere. (
t ·
c)
buidhe
15:27, 18 November 2023 (UTC)