This sentence from the "Composition and critical reception" section reads "with a length of four minutes and nine seconds", I have yet to find any GA song articles that tells readers their length in the article body.
I've had other good articles by myself pass with, and many GA-class songs by
Taylor Swift use it. I don't see the problem here.
Why do readers first learn about the composition and critical reception of the song? Where's the "background and production" section? Who wrote it? Which album was this song from? Who produced it? Remixed it? Were there any backing vocalist? How long did it took them to record the song? All of these comprehensive information is lacking.
The reason for this is, at the time of writing, I did not own the entire album, and as such lacked the liner notes which contain the recording information and the like. I own the album now, so I can fix the technical bits (ie. recording, vocals, etc.) Is the album it is on not mentioned in the lede and infobox?
This sentence from the "Chart performance" section reads "In its sixteenth chart week, "Here with Me" advanced to No. 1, holding that spot for eleven consecutive weeks". Wouldn't it be better to express that this was its peak?
Done
The "Charts" section needs to have the "U.S." ---> "US"
FN#3 why is musicnotes.com italicized? (add '' '' so it won't be italicized)
Done
FN#4 is
this a printed publication? If so, it needs to be in italics. Why is the publisher
Today's Christian Music italicized?
To make a long story short - it isn't now, but at the time of writing it was. Will add italics. The publisher italics is caused by the webcite template.
FN#5 co-author "Lee Nentwig" needs to be consistent with the way you present authors ---> Nentwig, Lee. Also
Crosswalk.com does not need to be italicized.
Done
FN#15's title "Billboard Charted Singles" needs to be rewritten to "Billboard Charted Singles". "Mikecurb.com" does not need to be in italics.
Done
FN#16, FN#17, FN#18, FN#19 and FN#20 Billboard needs to be in italics
Done
More comments
In "background and production" what is the difference with "was written and composed"? Why not just simply say "was composed by"?
Composition only refers to the music, not the lyrics.
"The song was mixed" ---> ""Here with Me" was
mixed by"
Done
This sentence is missing a word or a word needs to be removed "with mastering was handled by Ted Jensen at Sterling Sound"
Done
Too many sentences in the article beings with "the song" - needs a variety
Done
In "Charts" only like Billboard once and Radio & Records
Done
FN#3 Allmusic needs to be wikilink
Done
FN#6 why is crosswalk.com italicized?
Done
FN#9's title ""Here With Me – MercyMe (Billboard)"" ---> ""Here with Me – MercyMe (Billboard)""
If I get this right, Peter Kipely, Dan Muckala and Brad Russell are not members of the band, right? If not, in the first paragraph of the lead, put "Written and composed by the band, aswell as Peter Kipely, Dan Muckala and Brad Russell,
The lead second paragraph is really long winded, you could use an alternative such as:
"The song has peaked at No.1 in various charts, aswell as being ranked at No. 16 on the 2000s decade-end Hot Christian Songs and Hot Christian AC charts." - It just flows better, and means that when the reader gets to the 'Chart performance' section, they havent all read it in the lead.
I used a slightly different method, noting it's appearance on mainstream formats as well.
Grammar checked for Lead Done
Background and production
"The song was mixed by Shippen and produced by Kipley" Youve already mentioned their first names in the previous sentences, so just put their surnames.
"produced by Peter Kipley, with mastering was handled by Ted Jensen at Sterling Sound."- Dosent make sense to the latter. Either put "produced by Peter Kipley and the mastering being handled by Ted Jensen at Sterling Sound." OR anoter alternative.
Corrected both
Grammar checked for Background and production Done
Compostion
"with a length of four minutes and nine seconds.[3] The song is set in common time in the key of B major, with a moderate tempo of 84 beats per minute and a vocal range spanning from B3-F♯5". You chnage from written numbers (italliced) to the number (bold). Change one of them. :)
This sentence from the "Composition and critical reception" section reads "with a length of four minutes and nine seconds", I have yet to find any GA song articles that tells readers their length in the article body.
I've had other good articles by myself pass with, and many GA-class songs by
Taylor Swift use it. I don't see the problem here.
Why do readers first learn about the composition and critical reception of the song? Where's the "background and production" section? Who wrote it? Which album was this song from? Who produced it? Remixed it? Were there any backing vocalist? How long did it took them to record the song? All of these comprehensive information is lacking.
The reason for this is, at the time of writing, I did not own the entire album, and as such lacked the liner notes which contain the recording information and the like. I own the album now, so I can fix the technical bits (ie. recording, vocals, etc.) Is the album it is on not mentioned in the lede and infobox?
This sentence from the "Chart performance" section reads "In its sixteenth chart week, "Here with Me" advanced to No. 1, holding that spot for eleven consecutive weeks". Wouldn't it be better to express that this was its peak?
Done
The "Charts" section needs to have the "U.S." ---> "US"
FN#3 why is musicnotes.com italicized? (add '' '' so it won't be italicized)
Done
FN#4 is
this a printed publication? If so, it needs to be in italics. Why is the publisher
Today's Christian Music italicized?
To make a long story short - it isn't now, but at the time of writing it was. Will add italics. The publisher italics is caused by the webcite template.
FN#5 co-author "Lee Nentwig" needs to be consistent with the way you present authors ---> Nentwig, Lee. Also
Crosswalk.com does not need to be italicized.
Done
FN#15's title "Billboard Charted Singles" needs to be rewritten to "Billboard Charted Singles". "Mikecurb.com" does not need to be in italics.
Done
FN#16, FN#17, FN#18, FN#19 and FN#20 Billboard needs to be in italics
Done
More comments
In "background and production" what is the difference with "was written and composed"? Why not just simply say "was composed by"?
Composition only refers to the music, not the lyrics.
"The song was mixed" ---> ""Here with Me" was
mixed by"
Done
This sentence is missing a word or a word needs to be removed "with mastering was handled by Ted Jensen at Sterling Sound"
Done
Too many sentences in the article beings with "the song" - needs a variety
Done
In "Charts" only like Billboard once and Radio & Records
Done
FN#3 Allmusic needs to be wikilink
Done
FN#6 why is crosswalk.com italicized?
Done
FN#9's title ""Here With Me – MercyMe (Billboard)"" ---> ""Here with Me – MercyMe (Billboard)""
If I get this right, Peter Kipely, Dan Muckala and Brad Russell are not members of the band, right? If not, in the first paragraph of the lead, put "Written and composed by the band, aswell as Peter Kipely, Dan Muckala and Brad Russell,
The lead second paragraph is really long winded, you could use an alternative such as:
"The song has peaked at No.1 in various charts, aswell as being ranked at No. 16 on the 2000s decade-end Hot Christian Songs and Hot Christian AC charts." - It just flows better, and means that when the reader gets to the 'Chart performance' section, they havent all read it in the lead.
I used a slightly different method, noting it's appearance on mainstream formats as well.
Grammar checked for Lead Done
Background and production
"The song was mixed by Shippen and produced by Kipley" Youve already mentioned their first names in the previous sentences, so just put their surnames.
"produced by Peter Kipley, with mastering was handled by Ted Jensen at Sterling Sound."- Dosent make sense to the latter. Either put "produced by Peter Kipley and the mastering being handled by Ted Jensen at Sterling Sound." OR anoter alternative.
Corrected both
Grammar checked for Background and production Done
Compostion
"with a length of four minutes and nine seconds.[3] The song is set in common time in the key of B major, with a moderate tempo of 84 beats per minute and a vocal range spanning from B3-F♯5". You chnage from written numbers (italliced) to the number (bold). Change one of them. :)