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Images are appropriately tagged; sources are reliable. Earwig finds no issues. I don't have access to the sources so am assuming good faith instead of spotchecking.
"During this period, Boyle initiated renovation efforts at his estates at Castlemartyr, aiming to repair the damage caused by the war; these efforts targeted both his estate and the town of Castlemartyr itself". Does "renovation" apply to the town? That is, renovation and repair are not the same; I would have expected something like "During this period, Boyle begin renovation efforts at his estates at Castlemartyr and repair work in the town, aimed at the damage caused by the war".
Rephrased to sound more like your suggestion; what do you think of it now?
"As noted by Eoin Magennis": can we say who Magennis is? "...the historian Eoin Magennis" or whatever is appropriate?
Done
"because there was no serious threat of a money bill between 1733 and 1753": I think a reader unfamiliar with the topic needs to know why a money bill would have been troublesome.
Added a note explaining why a money bill was controversial
'Boyle eventually rose to be "the most effective undertaker or Irish parliamentary manager before 1800."' Direct quotes need a citation no later than the end of the sentence; and I would attribute this inline to Magennis as it's an opinion.
Done
"which as of 2006 resides in the Palace of Westminster collection": per
this page it's still there; the page is dated 2021 so you could at least go up to 2021.
Oops, sorry, yes I am planning on working on this, just got sidetracked by life (happens to the best of us...). I'll address your points over the course of this day. Thanks in advance for not immediately failing this review just because I was a tad lazy :)
Dabberoni15 (
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12:53, 17 September 2022 (UTC)reply
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Ireland, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of
Ireland on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join
the discussion and see a list of open tasks.IrelandWikipedia:WikiProject IrelandTemplate:WikiProject IrelandIreland articles
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Biography, a collaborative effort to create, develop and organize Wikipedia's articles about people. All interested editors are invited to
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Images are appropriately tagged; sources are reliable. Earwig finds no issues. I don't have access to the sources so am assuming good faith instead of spotchecking.
"During this period, Boyle initiated renovation efforts at his estates at Castlemartyr, aiming to repair the damage caused by the war; these efforts targeted both his estate and the town of Castlemartyr itself". Does "renovation" apply to the town? That is, renovation and repair are not the same; I would have expected something like "During this period, Boyle begin renovation efforts at his estates at Castlemartyr and repair work in the town, aimed at the damage caused by the war".
Rephrased to sound more like your suggestion; what do you think of it now?
"As noted by Eoin Magennis": can we say who Magennis is? "...the historian Eoin Magennis" or whatever is appropriate?
Done
"because there was no serious threat of a money bill between 1733 and 1753": I think a reader unfamiliar with the topic needs to know why a money bill would have been troublesome.
Added a note explaining why a money bill was controversial
'Boyle eventually rose to be "the most effective undertaker or Irish parliamentary manager before 1800."' Direct quotes need a citation no later than the end of the sentence; and I would attribute this inline to Magennis as it's an opinion.
Done
"which as of 2006 resides in the Palace of Westminster collection": per
this page it's still there; the page is dated 2021 so you could at least go up to 2021.
Oops, sorry, yes I am planning on working on this, just got sidetracked by life (happens to the best of us...). I'll address your points over the course of this day. Thanks in advance for not immediately failing this review just because I was a tad lazy :)
Dabberoni15 (
talk)
12:53, 17 September 2022 (UTC)reply