Ending-start, you better work your ass off for a good review, Lil-unique is a very good content editor, and I won't accept anything crappy. Unique, I do have one issue while going through the article. Its about the over-sectionalization of some of the content, especially the remix parts. Simply not needed. Can you imagine how long the TOC will be in a 640x480 screen? —
Legolas(talk2me)05:29, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
I will, don't worry. I will be as in dept as I can. I can't promise I will notice any ref problems, though. And I agree, there's a lot of different titles that are somewhat unnecessary. ℥nding·
start06:31, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Might I suggest just having one section for the "remix videos" and calling it "other versions" and just putting it under "music video." ℥nding·
start07:32, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Review and comments
Lead
"Hello Good Morning" is song by American rapper and producer Diddy and his band Dirty Money... --> Isn't Diddy-Dirty Money a band altogether? There is a page for them, so you should just list a link to that.
Three official remixes were released alongside the main single including the official remix with Rick Ross and Nicki Minaj, the grime remix with Skepta and a Team UK remix with Tinchy Stryder & Tinie Tempah --> Three official remixes were released alongside the main single: the official remix with Rick Ross and Nicki Minaj, the "grime remix" with Skepta, and a "Team UK remix" with Tinchy Stryder and Tinie Tempah.
Critics picked out the song as one of the better cuts from Last Train to Paris, mainly for Danja's production but criticised the lyrics for being superficial and lacking substance --> Critics dubbed the song one of the better songs from Last Train to Paris, noting Danja's production, but criticizing the lyrics for being superficial and lacking substance.
Commercially, the single was certified gold by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA) for selling in excess of 500,000 copies --> Commercially, the single was certified gold by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA); selling in excess of 500,000 copies.
Disagree not sure there's an issue here. Semi-colons are uses to link to sentences which could stand on their own as separate sentences. "selling in excess of 500,000 copies." would be a phrase not a sentence. --
Lil_℧niquℇ №1[talk]07:43, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Internationally the single peaked at number twenty-two in UK and was also particularly successful on the German Black Chart and UK R&B Chart, respectively peaking at number one and number eight --> Internationally the song peaked at number twenty-two in the UK, and was also particularly successful on the German Black Chart and UK R&B Chart; respectively peaking at number one and number eight.
"Hello Good Morning" was promoted with live performances on season nine of American Idol and Friday Night with Jonathan Ross amongst TV appearances --> "Hello Good Morning" was promoted with several live television performances, including the ninth season of American Idol and Friday Night with Jonathan Ross, amongst others.
An edited version of the clip was made for the official remix and a completely new street party-themed video was filmed for the grime remix --> Comma between the two different videos.
Dubbed the 'Official Remix', it was released in the United States on June 29, 2010 for digital download It was dubbed the "Official Remix," and was released in the United States digitally on June 29, 2010.
On December 31, 2010, a remix featuring Eminem was released --> On December 31, 2010, another remix of the song featuring rapper Eminem was released (where/how was it released?)
The finished clip for "Hello Good Morning", directed by Hype Williams,[32] premiered on May 11, 2010 through Dirty Money's official VEVO account --> reword.
T.I.'s scenes were amongst the last to be filmed, and took place in an apartment in Bel Aire, CA. --> Really needed? There's no mention of when the other scenes were filmed.
Yes there is in the behind the scenes video.... it shows that T.I.'s scenes were filmed on Day 4, the final day of the video shoot, in different location to the original shoot. --
Lil_℧niquℇ №1[talk]19:46, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Two problems with this, one it just redirects to a different site, and secondly the website has nothing to do with this article. Maybe add the music video instead, or just remove it altogether.
Ending-start, you better work your ass off for a good review, Lil-unique is a very good content editor, and I won't accept anything crappy. Unique, I do have one issue while going through the article. Its about the over-sectionalization of some of the content, especially the remix parts. Simply not needed. Can you imagine how long the TOC will be in a 640x480 screen? —
Legolas(talk2me)05:29, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
I will, don't worry. I will be as in dept as I can. I can't promise I will notice any ref problems, though. And I agree, there's a lot of different titles that are somewhat unnecessary. ℥nding·
start06:31, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Might I suggest just having one section for the "remix videos" and calling it "other versions" and just putting it under "music video." ℥nding·
start07:32, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Review and comments
Lead
"Hello Good Morning" is song by American rapper and producer Diddy and his band Dirty Money... --> Isn't Diddy-Dirty Money a band altogether? There is a page for them, so you should just list a link to that.
Three official remixes were released alongside the main single including the official remix with Rick Ross and Nicki Minaj, the grime remix with Skepta and a Team UK remix with Tinchy Stryder & Tinie Tempah --> Three official remixes were released alongside the main single: the official remix with Rick Ross and Nicki Minaj, the "grime remix" with Skepta, and a "Team UK remix" with Tinchy Stryder and Tinie Tempah.
Critics picked out the song as one of the better cuts from Last Train to Paris, mainly for Danja's production but criticised the lyrics for being superficial and lacking substance --> Critics dubbed the song one of the better songs from Last Train to Paris, noting Danja's production, but criticizing the lyrics for being superficial and lacking substance.
Commercially, the single was certified gold by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA) for selling in excess of 500,000 copies --> Commercially, the single was certified gold by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA); selling in excess of 500,000 copies.
Disagree not sure there's an issue here. Semi-colons are uses to link to sentences which could stand on their own as separate sentences. "selling in excess of 500,000 copies." would be a phrase not a sentence. --
Lil_℧niquℇ №1[talk]07:43, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Internationally the single peaked at number twenty-two in UK and was also particularly successful on the German Black Chart and UK R&B Chart, respectively peaking at number one and number eight --> Internationally the song peaked at number twenty-two in the UK, and was also particularly successful on the German Black Chart and UK R&B Chart; respectively peaking at number one and number eight.
"Hello Good Morning" was promoted with live performances on season nine of American Idol and Friday Night with Jonathan Ross amongst TV appearances --> "Hello Good Morning" was promoted with several live television performances, including the ninth season of American Idol and Friday Night with Jonathan Ross, amongst others.
An edited version of the clip was made for the official remix and a completely new street party-themed video was filmed for the grime remix --> Comma between the two different videos.
Dubbed the 'Official Remix', it was released in the United States on June 29, 2010 for digital download It was dubbed the "Official Remix," and was released in the United States digitally on June 29, 2010.
On December 31, 2010, a remix featuring Eminem was released --> On December 31, 2010, another remix of the song featuring rapper Eminem was released (where/how was it released?)
The finished clip for "Hello Good Morning", directed by Hype Williams,[32] premiered on May 11, 2010 through Dirty Money's official VEVO account --> reword.
T.I.'s scenes were amongst the last to be filmed, and took place in an apartment in Bel Aire, CA. --> Really needed? There's no mention of when the other scenes were filmed.
Yes there is in the behind the scenes video.... it shows that T.I.'s scenes were filmed on Day 4, the final day of the video shoot, in different location to the original shoot. --
Lil_℧niquℇ №1[talk]19:46, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Two problems with this, one it just redirects to a different site, and secondly the website has nothing to do with this article. Maybe add the music video instead, or just remove it altogether.