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Nice work acquiring so much information from a variety of verifiable sources. An encyclopedic tone is present throughout.
We recommend removing the subheadings in the Early Life section. The “Marriage” subheading is only one sentence long, which seems insufficient to constitute its own category. The “Death and Afterward” subheading belongs in the later “Awards, honors, and distinctions” section. Perhaps this section could be condensed into one block of text and retitled “Personal life” -- after all, a “Biography” should include information about education and career, which this section does not.
You could try to link to more articles in the “Awards, honors, and distinctions” section.
The article does not include a picture of an explanation of why there's no picture. If no pictures are available, you could always external link to images on a different website (source #5 would be great for this).
Another idea: perhaps you could add an Infobox for some quick information?
The Wikipedia Manual of Style states that page headings should only have the first word capitalized (e.g. “Education and Career” should be “Education and career”)
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HuskyDawg ( talk) 13:56, 29 November 2016 (UTC) Reviewed by HuskyDawg, Tahitihat, Wavemidnight
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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Jstudentsa, Burrito757, SpeedyNoodle.
Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT ( talk) 22:16, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
Nice work acquiring so much information from a variety of verifiable sources. An encyclopedic tone is present throughout.
We recommend removing the subheadings in the Early Life section. The “Marriage” subheading is only one sentence long, which seems insufficient to constitute its own category. The “Death and Afterward” subheading belongs in the later “Awards, honors, and distinctions” section. Perhaps this section could be condensed into one block of text and retitled “Personal life” -- after all, a “Biography” should include information about education and career, which this section does not.
You could try to link to more articles in the “Awards, honors, and distinctions” section.
The article does not include a picture of an explanation of why there's no picture. If no pictures are available, you could always external link to images on a different website (source #5 would be great for this).
Another idea: perhaps you could add an Infobox for some quick information?
The Wikipedia Manual of Style states that page headings should only have the first word capitalized (e.g. “Education and Career” should be “Education and career”)
Grammatical edits:
HuskyDawg ( talk) 13:56, 29 November 2016 (UTC) Reviewed by HuskyDawg, Tahitihat, Wavemidnight