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Reviewer: Hchc2009 ( talk · contribs) 17:20, 25 November 2011 (UTC)
1. Well-written:
(a) the prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct;
Done. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "agricultural policy maker". Henrig ( talk) 21:36, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "location". Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced 1918/19 with 1918-1919. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Now divided into two sentences. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "leave". Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Removed "end of October". Large demonstrations started at the end of October. At the moment I'm not sure when the strikes started. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 12:06, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 12:06, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 12:06, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Rephrased and shortened this sentence.
Added a clarification. Henrig ( talk) 12:30, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Rephrased the sentence and replaced "cannon" with "gun". (My dictionary is not very helpful.) Henrig ( talk) 12:30, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. It seems the information is the same and there is no danger of confusion with a school teacher. The longer version emphasized the self-study. The shorter version implies it. Henrig ( talk) 13:40, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 13:40, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Yes. Rau lived in a suburb of Stuttgart. But "also" is not necessary. Removed. Henrig ( talk) 13:40, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 13:40, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
"The secretary". Changed this sentence to "Rau became a full-time party functionary and the secretary of the agricultural division" Henrig ( talk) 14:45, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 14:45, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced "supposedly" with "might have been". At the moment I don't know such a statement by a historian. Henrig ( talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Changed to "the main internment centre".
Henrig (
talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Changed to "an internment centre" (Vernet is well-known, but it was not even the largest camp.)
Henrig (
talk)
23:14, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
Changed to "held". Henrig ( talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Changed to "When the war was over". Henrig ( talk) 18:57, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Removed. Henrig ( talk) 18:57, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 18:57, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
It's also not so clear in the source. Obviously there was a president for Brandenburg and a few vice-presidents. The vice-presidents are mentioned as responsible presidents for .... Replaced this passage with "assumed responsibility for" Henrig ( talk) 18:57, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:19, 8 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "Important 1946 events in Brandenburg" Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Removed "and notable" (User VM repl. 'especially" with "particularly") Henrig ( talk) 21:34, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
They used it for the purpose to redistribute capital. (Perhaps the meaning is not exactly the same like in German for the term "instrumentalisieren".) Apparently not! Replaced with "exploited". Henrig ( talk) 20:49, 7 December 2011 (UTC) Removed "highly". Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "disagreement ... triggered the Berlin Blockade." Henrig ( talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
I'm not sure. Perhaps a judicial body remained for a while. Henrig ( talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC) Actually, the DWK was formally abolished five days after the proclamation of the GDR. I've rephrased this passage now. Henrig ( talk) 12:52, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with 'Between 1949 and 1950' Henrig ( talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Expanded this paragraph. Henrig ( talk) 20:02, 5 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:54, 5 December 2011 (UTC)
Rephrased by user Volunteer Marek. Henrig ( talk) 18:31, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:31, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Comrade. Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:31, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:31, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done Henrig ( talk) 19:31, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Not sure at the moment, but "senior leader" seems to be better. Done Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:23, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:23, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:23, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:23, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "peripheral states" Henrig ( talk) 20:54, 5 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "fighter squadron" Henrig ( talk) 20:18, 5 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "secured". Henrig ( talk) 21:34, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
(b) it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Factually accurate and verifiable:
(a) it provides references to all sources of information in the section(s) dedicated to the attribution of these sources according to the guide to layout;
(b) it provides in-line citations from reliable sources for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines;
Rephrased this sentence and added a reference. Henrig ( talk) 21:36, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:36, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:36, 4 December 2011 (UTC) (c) it contains no original research.
Broad in its coverage:
(a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic;
(b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without bias.
Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
Illustrated, if possible, by images:
(a) images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content;
(b) images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
Done Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Hchc2009 ( talk · contribs) 17:20, 25 November 2011 (UTC)
1. Well-written:
(a) the prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct;
Done. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "agricultural policy maker". Henrig ( talk) 21:36, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "location". Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced 1918/19 with 1918-1919. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Now divided into two sentences. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "leave". Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Removed "end of October". Large demonstrations started at the end of October. At the moment I'm not sure when the strikes started. Henrig ( talk) 08:12, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 12:06, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 12:06, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 12:06, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Rephrased and shortened this sentence.
Added a clarification. Henrig ( talk) 12:30, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Rephrased the sentence and replaced "cannon" with "gun". (My dictionary is not very helpful.) Henrig ( talk) 12:30, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. It seems the information is the same and there is no danger of confusion with a school teacher. The longer version emphasized the self-study. The shorter version implies it. Henrig ( talk) 13:40, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 13:40, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Yes. Rau lived in a suburb of Stuttgart. But "also" is not necessary. Removed. Henrig ( talk) 13:40, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 13:40, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
"The secretary". Changed this sentence to "Rau became a full-time party functionary and the secretary of the agricultural division" Henrig ( talk) 14:45, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 14:45, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced "supposedly" with "might have been". At the moment I don't know such a statement by a historian. Henrig ( talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Changed to "the main internment centre".
Henrig (
talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Changed to "an internment centre" (Vernet is well-known, but it was not even the largest camp.)
Henrig (
talk)
23:14, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
Changed to "held". Henrig ( talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 18:24, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Changed to "When the war was over". Henrig ( talk) 18:57, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Removed. Henrig ( talk) 18:57, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 18:57, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
It's also not so clear in the source. Obviously there was a president for Brandenburg and a few vice-presidents. The vice-presidents are mentioned as responsible presidents for .... Replaced this passage with "assumed responsibility for" Henrig ( talk) 18:57, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:19, 8 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "Important 1946 events in Brandenburg" Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Removed "and notable" (User VM repl. 'especially" with "particularly") Henrig ( talk) 21:34, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
They used it for the purpose to redistribute capital. (Perhaps the meaning is not exactly the same like in German for the term "instrumentalisieren".) Apparently not! Replaced with "exploited". Henrig ( talk) 20:49, 7 December 2011 (UTC) Removed "highly". Henrig ( talk) 21:02, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "disagreement ... triggered the Berlin Blockade." Henrig ( talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
I'm not sure. Perhaps a judicial body remained for a while. Henrig ( talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC) Actually, the DWK was formally abolished five days after the proclamation of the GDR. I've rephrased this passage now. Henrig ( talk) 12:52, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with 'Between 1949 and 1950' Henrig ( talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Expanded this paragraph. Henrig ( talk) 20:02, 5 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:54, 5 December 2011 (UTC)
Rephrased by user Volunteer Marek. Henrig ( talk) 18:31, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:31, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Comrade. Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:31, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:31, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done Henrig ( talk) 19:31, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Not sure at the moment, but "senior leader" seems to be better. Done Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:23, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:23, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:23, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 20:23, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "peripheral states" Henrig ( talk) 20:54, 5 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "fighter squadron" Henrig ( talk) 20:18, 5 December 2011 (UTC)
Replaced with "secured". Henrig ( talk) 21:34, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)
(b) it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Factually accurate and verifiable:
(a) it provides references to all sources of information in the section(s) dedicated to the attribution of these sources according to the guide to layout;
(b) it provides in-line citations from reliable sources for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines;
Rephrased this sentence and added a reference. Henrig ( talk) 21:36, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:36, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
Done. Henrig ( talk) 21:36, 4 December 2011 (UTC) (c) it contains no original research.
Broad in its coverage:
(a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic;
(b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without bias.
Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
Illustrated, if possible, by images:
(a) images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content;
(b) images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
Done Henrig ( talk) 19:59, 1 December 2011 (UTC)