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Second World War, and perhaps a date too (although you might think it too obvious)
Put a month/year in but haven't linked Second World War. In other reviews I have been asked to take it out as being unnecessary.
Zawed (
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04:07, 8 May 2022 (UTC)reply
Second World War
"No. 11 Group Fighter Pool" is this the type of unit that might deserve a red link?
"Stephen's section leader was the pilot that first engaged the enemy" not sure how relevant this is. Perhaps replace with an explanation that the squadron did not shoot it down, and subsequently No. 43 Sqn..?
" subsequently held staff postings..." considering this period seems to stretch from 1942 to 1945, would be useful to have some dates to clarify when/where he was doing what
The sources only give very superficial coverage of this stage of his life unfortunately, so can't give specific dates or even time frames.
Zawed (
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05:35, 8 May 2022 (UTC)reply
Having a look at internet archive suggests there might be a little more to write about his newspaper work and exploration/expedition support, but only minor details
I think coverage is reasonable for GA. If I take this to A-class, I will scout around but it is not in my plans to develop this one beyond GA anyway.
Zawed (
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10:19, 8 May 2022 (UTC)reply
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Zawed: I'm happy with the changes you've made, having done a couple of minor edits myself. I should have made it more clear that the "minor details" were totally optional, and I agree that they're not needed to fulfil the GA criteria. Passing this article.
Pickersgill-Cunliffe (
talk)
13:27, 9 May 2022 (UTC)reply
Link
Second World War, and perhaps a date too (although you might think it too obvious)
Put a month/year in but haven't linked Second World War. In other reviews I have been asked to take it out as being unnecessary.
Zawed (
talk)
04:07, 8 May 2022 (UTC)reply
Second World War
"No. 11 Group Fighter Pool" is this the type of unit that might deserve a red link?
"Stephen's section leader was the pilot that first engaged the enemy" not sure how relevant this is. Perhaps replace with an explanation that the squadron did not shoot it down, and subsequently No. 43 Sqn..?
" subsequently held staff postings..." considering this period seems to stretch from 1942 to 1945, would be useful to have some dates to clarify when/where he was doing what
The sources only give very superficial coverage of this stage of his life unfortunately, so can't give specific dates or even time frames.
Zawed (
talk)
05:35, 8 May 2022 (UTC)reply
Having a look at internet archive suggests there might be a little more to write about his newspaper work and exploration/expedition support, but only minor details
I think coverage is reasonable for GA. If I take this to A-class, I will scout around but it is not in my plans to develop this one beyond GA anyway.
Zawed (
talk)
10:19, 8 May 2022 (UTC)reply
@
Zawed: I'm happy with the changes you've made, having done a couple of minor edits myself. I should have made it more clear that the "minor details" were totally optional, and I agree that they're not needed to fulfil the GA criteria. Passing this article.
Pickersgill-Cunliffe (
talk)
13:27, 9 May 2022 (UTC)reply