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Nominator: Jaguarnik ( talk · contribs) 00:03, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Averageuntitleduser ( talk · contribs) 01:25, 2 July 2024 (UTC)
Howdy, Jaguarnik! From a glance at the plot, I couldn't resist this. Averageuntitleduser ( talk) 01:25, 2 July 2024 (UTC)
style of writing— in both instances, "writing style" would be more conventional.
the French literary establishment— for a split-second, I thought this was in reference to Gallimard, consider workshopping it.
would go on to live for brief periods— "then briefly lived"
childhood memories of vodou— perhaps give the full " Haitian Vodou".
appearance ofand
apparitionimply that this is a supernatural or unusual event. If this was not your intention, how about: "In January 1938, a dead woman is driven to her funeral; the locals call this phenomenon..."
at the hands of— as an idiom, this should be replaced with something more direct, e.g. "was killed by", though that may be too certain.
30 years have passed— reformulate this so "30" does not begin the sentence.
"death"— "disappearance" already modifies this word, so the quotation marks are likely not needed.
a theme that— this can be excised.
and several other awards— it would be worth noting these awards if the sources do too.
Not seeing any red flags; lots of established journals, professors, writers, and publishers. Formatting looks good. Earwig score is low, and I found no close paraphrasing during the spot-check.
The range of sources, both in language and timescale, is commendable. I don't sense any missing sections or details and note that the background around Depestre helps inform the later analysis. After searching in French and English through TWL and Google Scholar, I feel the article is sufficiently broad. I've also checked the unused results, the most detailed of which is a master's thesis and a peculiar article–digital project; both are fun but not very citable.
No recent content disputes or edit wars.
The cover has a proper fair use rationale. The Jacmel view is an own-work and seems fairly representative of the setting.
The "zombie-writer" bit and how much Depestre's intentions differed from public perception were quite interesting. A very accessible read overall! Beginning with some prose comments. I've made a few minor tweaks myself; feel free to revert anything you disagree with. Averageuntitleduser ( talk) 21:40, 3 July 2024 (UTC)
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Nominator: Jaguarnik ( talk · contribs) 00:03, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Averageuntitleduser ( talk · contribs) 01:25, 2 July 2024 (UTC)
Howdy, Jaguarnik! From a glance at the plot, I couldn't resist this. Averageuntitleduser ( talk) 01:25, 2 July 2024 (UTC)
style of writing— in both instances, "writing style" would be more conventional.
the French literary establishment— for a split-second, I thought this was in reference to Gallimard, consider workshopping it.
would go on to live for brief periods— "then briefly lived"
childhood memories of vodou— perhaps give the full " Haitian Vodou".
appearance ofand
apparitionimply that this is a supernatural or unusual event. If this was not your intention, how about: "In January 1938, a dead woman is driven to her funeral; the locals call this phenomenon..."
at the hands of— as an idiom, this should be replaced with something more direct, e.g. "was killed by", though that may be too certain.
30 years have passed— reformulate this so "30" does not begin the sentence.
"death"— "disappearance" already modifies this word, so the quotation marks are likely not needed.
a theme that— this can be excised.
and several other awards— it would be worth noting these awards if the sources do too.
Not seeing any red flags; lots of established journals, professors, writers, and publishers. Formatting looks good. Earwig score is low, and I found no close paraphrasing during the spot-check.
The range of sources, both in language and timescale, is commendable. I don't sense any missing sections or details and note that the background around Depestre helps inform the later analysis. After searching in French and English through TWL and Google Scholar, I feel the article is sufficiently broad. I've also checked the unused results, the most detailed of which is a master's thesis and a peculiar article–digital project; both are fun but not very citable.
No recent content disputes or edit wars.
The cover has a proper fair use rationale. The Jacmel view is an own-work and seems fairly representative of the setting.
The "zombie-writer" bit and how much Depestre's intentions differed from public perception were quite interesting. A very accessible read overall! Beginning with some prose comments. I've made a few minor tweaks myself; feel free to revert anything you disagree with. Averageuntitleduser ( talk) 21:40, 3 July 2024 (UTC)