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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 ( talk · contribs) 09:19, 27 March 2019 (UTC) reply

A few comments from me:

• link interwar period in the lead
• link Displacement (ship)
• the designed displacement doesn't match between the infobox and body
• suggest two pairs of Parson's
  • At this time, turbines were divided into high- and low-pressure turbines in a set, with each driving one shaft. Later they were combined into one casing so each shaft was driven by a set of turbines, although this latter is often ignored.-- Sturmvogel 66 ( talk) 21:05, 29 March 2019 (UTC) reply
• the boiler types don't match between the infobox and body
• don't we use the sea trial speed in the infobox?
• the range conversions don't match between the infobox and body, rounding error?
• why use the 1917 crew size in the infobox when the 1916 one is as built? Also, I don't see the 1917 crew size in the body.
• the TT conversions don't match between the infobox and body
• the conning tower maximum armour thickness doesn't match between the infobox and body
• any info about the types of aircraft she carried?
• suggest "The aft torpedo tube of each pair was also removed at that time"
• suggest "and adding thea portside octuple..."
• suggest "The forward pair ofremaining submerged torpedo tubes", but I query whether "submerged" is required, as they only had submerged TTs?
  • Yeah, though I think that all the refs to the tubes could be simplified to forward and aft tubes. Wow, it's really apparent that I didn't update the infobox when I overhauled the description a few years ago. Thanks for bouncing them against each other to catch all these.-- Sturmvogel 66 ( talk) 21:05, 29 March 2019 (UTC) reply
• if using 1st BS, introduce BS as the initialisation when introducing the squadron?
• "but this fell over" is an odd turn of phrase. Perhaps "overshot the target"?
• suggest "Two of theher hits on Derfflinger" as we have just mentioned other ships firing on Derfflinger
• "with the Revenge"
• link Resolution
• instead of "For the duration of the war that she served", suggest "for the remainder of her service in the war"
• "On the following day. Revenge" should be a comma
• just for consistency, suggest 21½ be 21.5
• I think it should be "18-minute bombardment"?
• "three surviving sisters" begs the question of which ship had been lost
• say what sort of ship Hermes was and link at first mention, and drop "the carrier" from second mention
• "Ramillies and her sisters" I think this is a copypaste error and should be Revenge? This occurs again
• "on the morning onof 9 April"
• link Royal Sovereign
• Switky could do with a location of publication
• the cost in the infobox isn't covered in the article
• images all look fine.

That's me done. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 09:19, 27 March 2019 (UTC) reply

Thanks for your most thorough review. See if my changes are satisfactory.-- Sturmvogel 66 ( talk) 00:48, 30 March 2019 (UTC) reply

This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Nice work! Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 03:08, 30 March 2019 (UTC) reply