This article is in great shape. I have a few comments/queries:
was Resolution a super-dreadnought or dreadnought battleship? If so, perhaps state this in the lead and first section.
Done, good idea
the designed displacement doesn't match between the body and infobox. check?
Hmm, I hadn't really checked the box because I figured when Sturm redid the design section and the box a few years back, he had taken care of it - either there was a slip up or some errors crept in during that time
suggest "2 setspairs" as a set doesn't state how many?
Good idea
the range doesn't match between the body and infobox. check?
Fixed
shouldn't the crew numbers in the infobox be as designed/commissioned?
Yes
mention in the body that the casemated guns were all single mounts?
Done
1929–1931 and 1932–1933 per MOS:DATERANGE
Fixed
"the aft pair of torpedo tubes were also removed" but weren't they on the broadside? Same query re: "The forward pair of submerged torpedo tubes"
Right, all four on the broadside - the ones removed were the tubes furthest aft on each side
"were replaced with QF 4-inch Mk XVI guns in Mk XIX twin mounts"
Good catch
"nine 20 mm Oerlikons" and were these single mounts?
Fixed the plural, but I'll have to ping @
Sturmvogel 66: since I don't have Raven & Roberts
the crew numbers in the infobox aren't in the body?
Fixed
link keel laying, ceremonial ship launching and ship commissioning?
Done
Smryna→Smyrna
Fixed
typo "in hte collision"
Fixed
when Bévéziers torpedoed Resolution, were there casualties?
I would assume so, but Smith doesn't mention any, oddly enough. I can't find anything specific, but
this indicates there were 39 British casualties] in the course of the operation, but both battleships were hit repeatedly by coastal guns, as were several other ships in the squadron, so who knows how many of those were from Resolution. There's a copy of
The Guns of Dakar at OSU - I'll see if I can pick it up this week, maybe it'll have casualty details.
"Australian Division" this was the 9th Division (Australia), not the 1st Division, and this was Operation Pamphlet
Fixed
Queen Elizabeth-class battleship is duplinked
Removed
no copyvio or plagiarism detected by the Earwig tool, just some sentence fragments from
[1], consisting of common phrases.
the EL of Photos of William S Barton HMS Resolution 1939-43 doesn't resolve for me.
Hmm, it's not working for me either - removed
the cost in the infobox isn't in the body
Removed - I don't generally like including cost for things like this
sources all good and properly formatted
File:HMS Revenge (1916) profile drawing.png what was the source used to draw it?
Hmm, that might be a problem - the uploader retired in 2008 (though they have edited sporadically since then, including once in November 2018) - I'll leave a note but I don't expect a reply anytime soon (if at all).
No worries, I'm passing it as is. Just see my suggestion re: the TT removals, and remember the single mounts once Sturm gets back to you. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, and contains no plagiarism. Images have appropriate licensing and captions. Nice work!
Peacemaker67 (
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09:00, 29 January 2019 (UTC)reply
This article is in great shape. I have a few comments/queries:
was Resolution a super-dreadnought or dreadnought battleship? If so, perhaps state this in the lead and first section.
Done, good idea
the designed displacement doesn't match between the body and infobox. check?
Hmm, I hadn't really checked the box because I figured when Sturm redid the design section and the box a few years back, he had taken care of it - either there was a slip up or some errors crept in during that time
suggest "2 setspairs" as a set doesn't state how many?
Good idea
the range doesn't match between the body and infobox. check?
Fixed
shouldn't the crew numbers in the infobox be as designed/commissioned?
Yes
mention in the body that the casemated guns were all single mounts?
Done
1929–1931 and 1932–1933 per MOS:DATERANGE
Fixed
"the aft pair of torpedo tubes were also removed" but weren't they on the broadside? Same query re: "The forward pair of submerged torpedo tubes"
Right, all four on the broadside - the ones removed were the tubes furthest aft on each side
"were replaced with QF 4-inch Mk XVI guns in Mk XIX twin mounts"
Good catch
"nine 20 mm Oerlikons" and were these single mounts?
Fixed the plural, but I'll have to ping @
Sturmvogel 66: since I don't have Raven & Roberts
the crew numbers in the infobox aren't in the body?
Fixed
link keel laying, ceremonial ship launching and ship commissioning?
Done
Smryna→Smyrna
Fixed
typo "in hte collision"
Fixed
when Bévéziers torpedoed Resolution, were there casualties?
I would assume so, but Smith doesn't mention any, oddly enough. I can't find anything specific, but
this indicates there were 39 British casualties] in the course of the operation, but both battleships were hit repeatedly by coastal guns, as were several other ships in the squadron, so who knows how many of those were from Resolution. There's a copy of
The Guns of Dakar at OSU - I'll see if I can pick it up this week, maybe it'll have casualty details.
"Australian Division" this was the 9th Division (Australia), not the 1st Division, and this was Operation Pamphlet
Fixed
Queen Elizabeth-class battleship is duplinked
Removed
no copyvio or plagiarism detected by the Earwig tool, just some sentence fragments from
[1], consisting of common phrases.
the EL of Photos of William S Barton HMS Resolution 1939-43 doesn't resolve for me.
Hmm, it's not working for me either - removed
the cost in the infobox isn't in the body
Removed - I don't generally like including cost for things like this
sources all good and properly formatted
File:HMS Revenge (1916) profile drawing.png what was the source used to draw it?
Hmm, that might be a problem - the uploader retired in 2008 (though they have edited sporadically since then, including once in November 2018) - I'll leave a note but I don't expect a reply anytime soon (if at all).
No worries, I'm passing it as is. Just see my suggestion re: the TT removals, and remember the single mounts once Sturm gets back to you. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, and contains no plagiarism. Images have appropriate licensing and captions. Nice work!
Peacemaker67 (
click to talk to me)
09:00, 29 January 2019 (UTC)reply