" After Jutland, she was relegated to coast defense duties in the English Channel, only rejoining the Grand Fleet in 1918. She was reduced to reserve in 1918" - under Career it says "Dreadnought was put into reserve at Rosyth in February 1919."
Good catch.
Genesis
In the first para, two sentences start with "A related issue was that" - repetitious and needs rewording.
"with a main battery of a dozen twelve-inch guns in eight turrets, twelve inches of belt armour," - here the numbers are spelled out,
" to include a secondary armament of 9.2-inch (234 mm) that could fight at longer ranges than the 6-inch (152 mm) gun on older ships, but a proposal to arm them solely with twelve-inch guns was rejected" - here there is a mixture of spelled out and numbers. Sometimes this is warranted for the sake of clarification, but the use here seems inconsistent. There needs to be consistency throughout the article on this issue. (It is very distracting the way it is.) See
MOS - Numbers
Is there a need for this heading? It only contains two sentences which could just be added to the section above.
Development of the Dreadnought
"This was deemed necessary after the Russian battleship Tsesarevich was deemed to have survived a Japanese torpedo hit by virtue of her heavy internal bulkhead during the Russo-Japanese War." - repeat of "deemed" so needs rewording.
General characteristics
Is this header needed? Couldn't the statements under it just go under Description with no separate header?
Done
"Dreadnought were significantly larger than her predecessors of the Lord Nelson-class." - should this be "was significantly"?
" After Jutland, she was relegated to coast defense duties in the English Channel, only rejoining the Grand Fleet in 1918. She was reduced to reserve in 1918" - under Career it says "Dreadnought was put into reserve at Rosyth in February 1919."
Good catch.
Genesis
In the first para, two sentences start with "A related issue was that" - repetitious and needs rewording.
"with a main battery of a dozen twelve-inch guns in eight turrets, twelve inches of belt armour," - here the numbers are spelled out,
" to include a secondary armament of 9.2-inch (234 mm) that could fight at longer ranges than the 6-inch (152 mm) gun on older ships, but a proposal to arm them solely with twelve-inch guns was rejected" - here there is a mixture of spelled out and numbers. Sometimes this is warranted for the sake of clarification, but the use here seems inconsistent. There needs to be consistency throughout the article on this issue. (It is very distracting the way it is.) See
MOS - Numbers
Is there a need for this heading? It only contains two sentences which could just be added to the section above.
Development of the Dreadnought
"This was deemed necessary after the Russian battleship Tsesarevich was deemed to have survived a Japanese torpedo hit by virtue of her heavy internal bulkhead during the Russo-Japanese War." - repeat of "deemed" so needs rewording.
General characteristics
Is this header needed? Couldn't the statements under it just go under Description with no separate header?
Done
"Dreadnought were significantly larger than her predecessors of the Lord Nelson-class." - should this be "was significantly"?