Pass Offline references accepted in good faith. Cursory check of Google Books shows references that back up source material here.
It is broad in its coverage:
Not Yet
Unit cost preferred as always, though understanding that's not common to find.
See my comment on the Commonwealth GAN
"During sweeps by the fleet, she and her sisters often steamed at the heads of divisions of the far more valuable dreadnoughts," -- One this one (and maybe the others) it might be helpful to explain, in a footnote at least, why this was the case? The ships are about 10 years old here but are already being treated as obsolete. Of course much to be said of the rapid advance in capital ship design at the time.
I've added a line to the Design section about the ship's rapid plunge into obsolescence
No first reference to Bradford again here.
Fixed
"Dominion paid off to serve as a parent ship for the Zeebrugge Raid and the first Ostend Raid." -- Explanation of a parent ship's role might make sense here.
Added a bit on this
Last graph mentions being paid off twice, with the link on the second reference, a bit confusing.
Pass Offline references accepted in good faith. Cursory check of Google Books shows references that back up source material here.
It is broad in its coverage:
Not Yet
Unit cost preferred as always, though understanding that's not common to find.
See my comment on the Commonwealth GAN
"During sweeps by the fleet, she and her sisters often steamed at the heads of divisions of the far more valuable dreadnoughts," -- One this one (and maybe the others) it might be helpful to explain, in a footnote at least, why this was the case? The ships are about 10 years old here but are already being treated as obsolete. Of course much to be said of the rapid advance in capital ship design at the time.
I've added a line to the Design section about the ship's rapid plunge into obsolescence
No first reference to Bradford again here.
Fixed
"Dominion paid off to serve as a parent ship for the Zeebrugge Raid and the first Ostend Raid." -- Explanation of a parent ship's role might make sense here.
Added a bit on this
Last graph mentions being paid off twice, with the link on the second reference, a bit confusing.