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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 ( talk · contribs) 08:15, 24 August 2018 (UTC)
This article is in good shape. I have a few comments:
- I've made a few tweaks, feel free to revert or further improve
- HDMS needs some sort of explanation/note. What does it stand for? Perhaps something like what is commonly done for SMS?
- should Nordland be bolded in the lead as an alternative name?
- I never bother.
- suggest "Like
the precedingthat class" if that is what is being referred to. - "but was intended" is but the right word here? Perhaps "and"?
- "eight 10.5-centimeter (4.1 in) guns?
- "the main armament to 15-centimeter"?
- displacement doesn't match between infobox and body
- 50 millimeter
s - 10–20 millimeter
s - link flagship at first mention in the body
- add a sentence explaining what happened with her between the German invasion and 1943
- Source doesn't say other than she was training in 1943.
- File:Niels Juel artilleriskib 1923-1943.jpg needs a publication date for the US PD tag
- same for File:Niels Juel (1918) Plan.jpg
- same for File:Niels Juel 1918 420.jpg
- same for File:Niels Iuel attacked by German planes 29 August 1943.jpg
- same for File:Nordland.jpg
- Shit, I always forget that I need to meet all three bullet requirements for the URAA license. I'm gonna claim though that the diagram, as a government doc, doesn't need to be formally published, so we have to use date of creation which was, I suspect, was around 1922.
That's me done, placing on hold for the above comments to be addressed. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 09:30, 24 August 2018 (UTC)
- Everything done except the pics which I'll do shortly. Thanks for the thorough review.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
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20:37, 25 August 2018 (UTC)
- Found a good pic.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
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14:27, 26 August 2018 (UTC)
- Great, those images look fine now. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 00:21, 27 August 2018 (UTC)
- Found a good pic.--
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 ( talk · contribs) 08:15, 24 August 2018 (UTC)
This article is in good shape. I have a few comments:
- I've made a few tweaks, feel free to revert or further improve
- HDMS needs some sort of explanation/note. What does it stand for? Perhaps something like what is commonly done for SMS?
- should Nordland be bolded in the lead as an alternative name?
- I never bother.
- suggest "Like
the precedingthat class" if that is what is being referred to. - "but was intended" is but the right word here? Perhaps "and"?
- "eight 10.5-centimeter (4.1 in) guns?
- "the main armament to 15-centimeter"?
- displacement doesn't match between infobox and body
- 50 millimeter
s - 10–20 millimeter
s - link flagship at first mention in the body
- add a sentence explaining what happened with her between the German invasion and 1943
- Source doesn't say other than she was training in 1943.
- File:Niels Juel artilleriskib 1923-1943.jpg needs a publication date for the US PD tag
- same for File:Niels Juel (1918) Plan.jpg
- same for File:Niels Juel 1918 420.jpg
- same for File:Niels Iuel attacked by German planes 29 August 1943.jpg
- same for File:Nordland.jpg
- Shit, I always forget that I need to meet all three bullet requirements for the URAA license. I'm gonna claim though that the diagram, as a government doc, doesn't need to be formally published, so we have to use date of creation which was, I suspect, was around 1922.
That's me done, placing on hold for the above comments to be addressed. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 09:30, 24 August 2018 (UTC)
- Everything done except the pics which I'll do shortly. Thanks for the thorough review.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk)
20:37, 25 August 2018 (UTC)
- Found a good pic.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk)
14:27, 26 August 2018 (UTC)
- Great, those images look fine now. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 00:21, 27 August 2018 (UTC)
- Found a good pic.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk)
14:27, 26 August 2018 (UTC)