Before I give a full review, something that I immediately noticed is that the sequel section is very small, and the Thirty Flights of Loving link just points back to that section. Since there's no article for that game, can you add more details about it? You tell us how the game was funded and something about its music, but nothing about its plot or gameplay. —Torchiesttalkedits23:28, 10 January 2013 (UTC)reply
My only problem is that in the development section, you use just one source for the entire thing. Can you find any other sources talking about development?
As I said above, I'd like to see a little more explanation of the sequel. I also think you need to describe the game's plot, which can probably fit in the gameplay section rather than getting its own, since the game is so short.
This pretty close, and if you can add another development source, fix the image NFUR, and give more info on the sequel and plot, I think this will be good to go. Until then, it is on hold. —Torchiesttalkedits04:52, 11 January 2013 (UTC)reply
Yay. Well, the game has not a big plot. Its sjut about a spy who has to do missions and nothing else. Nothing complex. let me see if I can add a bit of that. I will do the sequel expansion too. Sadly, I had a rough time finding that dev source; I feel there won't be any other. I will take a look, however. Thank you Torchiest. —
ΛΧΣ2123:56, 11 January 2013 (UTC)reply
Yeah, I know it has very little plot, but you can describe the events, like, you poison a drink, you shoot some birds, you chase someone at the end, etc. If you can't find another source for development, that's okay, but yeah see what you can do. Cheers. —Torchiesttalkedits00:01, 12 January 2013 (UTC)reply
I removed the source as unreliable. I am editing from an iPad and its very unconfortable to write the plot details from here, so Ill do it tonite at home. Regards. —
ΛΧΣ2118:08, 15 January 2013 (UTC)reply
Okay, I adjusted the wording of the image rationale. Let me know when you're done working on the plot and I will give it one more copy edit and then pass this thing. :) —Torchiesttalkedits17:20, 22 January 2013 (UTC)reply
Okay, I have exoanded as much as I could. Copyedit please :) I will take this to FAC as soon as my other FAC closes. And thanks. —
ΛΧΣ2118:19, 22 January 2013 (UTC)reply
Before I give a full review, something that I immediately noticed is that the sequel section is very small, and the Thirty Flights of Loving link just points back to that section. Since there's no article for that game, can you add more details about it? You tell us how the game was funded and something about its music, but nothing about its plot or gameplay. —Torchiesttalkedits23:28, 10 January 2013 (UTC)reply
My only problem is that in the development section, you use just one source for the entire thing. Can you find any other sources talking about development?
As I said above, I'd like to see a little more explanation of the sequel. I also think you need to describe the game's plot, which can probably fit in the gameplay section rather than getting its own, since the game is so short.
This pretty close, and if you can add another development source, fix the image NFUR, and give more info on the sequel and plot, I think this will be good to go. Until then, it is on hold. —Torchiesttalkedits04:52, 11 January 2013 (UTC)reply
Yay. Well, the game has not a big plot. Its sjut about a spy who has to do missions and nothing else. Nothing complex. let me see if I can add a bit of that. I will do the sequel expansion too. Sadly, I had a rough time finding that dev source; I feel there won't be any other. I will take a look, however. Thank you Torchiest. —
ΛΧΣ2123:56, 11 January 2013 (UTC)reply
Yeah, I know it has very little plot, but you can describe the events, like, you poison a drink, you shoot some birds, you chase someone at the end, etc. If you can't find another source for development, that's okay, but yeah see what you can do. Cheers. —Torchiesttalkedits00:01, 12 January 2013 (UTC)reply
I removed the source as unreliable. I am editing from an iPad and its very unconfortable to write the plot details from here, so Ill do it tonite at home. Regards. —
ΛΧΣ2118:08, 15 January 2013 (UTC)reply
Okay, I adjusted the wording of the image rationale. Let me know when you're done working on the plot and I will give it one more copy edit and then pass this thing. :) —Torchiesttalkedits17:20, 22 January 2013 (UTC)reply
Okay, I have exoanded as much as I could. Copyedit please :) I will take this to FAC as soon as my other FAC closes. And thanks. —
ΛΧΣ2118:19, 22 January 2013 (UTC)reply