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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 ( talk · contribs) 23:46, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
Picking this one up. Review to follow. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 23:46, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
Gordon Chesney Wilson was born in Wimmera, AustraliaThe Wimmera is a region, not a town. It is the south western part of Victoria. I would re-word this to "Gordon Chesney Wilson was born in the Wimmera region of Victoria, Australia".
on either 1 or 3 August 1865Where does this 1 August date come from? All my sources give the birth date as 3 August. eg. [3] [4]
The elder Wilson was an ex-miner who had made a fortune cattle ranchingWe don't have ranching in Australia. He would be described as a "grazier" or a"pastoralist". Although cattle may have been important, they are not mentioned in his biography or obituary, which talk about his sheep, goats and salmon. [5] [6]
As the Dome was an incredibly sacred space to Jews and Muslims, the expedition were nervous about digging there and therefore only did so at night, while wearing Arabic clothing.was nervous. And drop "incredibly" - seems pretty credible to me.
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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 ( talk · contribs) 23:46, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
Picking this one up. Review to follow. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 23:46, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
Gordon Chesney Wilson was born in Wimmera, AustraliaThe Wimmera is a region, not a town. It is the south western part of Victoria. I would re-word this to "Gordon Chesney Wilson was born in the Wimmera region of Victoria, Australia".
on either 1 or 3 August 1865Where does this 1 August date come from? All my sources give the birth date as 3 August. eg. [3] [4]
The elder Wilson was an ex-miner who had made a fortune cattle ranchingWe don't have ranching in Australia. He would be described as a "grazier" or a"pastoralist". Although cattle may have been important, they are not mentioned in his biography or obituary, which talk about his sheep, goats and salmon. [5] [6]
As the Dome was an incredibly sacred space to Jews and Muslims, the expedition were nervous about digging there and therefore only did so at night, while wearing Arabic clothing.was nervous. And drop "incredibly" - seems pretty credible to me.
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Hawkeye7
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20:26, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
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