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Nominator: Kyle Peake ( talk · contribs) 21:07, 29 May 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: IanTEB ( talk · contribs) 17:50, 16 June 2024 (UTC)
Sorry it took so long to return a review to you. This one looks interesting so I'll give it a shot!
although he said West and his group 'were really cool'- You can cut this since his opinion on the group already comes across with the text before it.
whom he described as 'amazing artists'- I would cut the last quote since it isn't too relevant to this specific song. I try to watch using this kind of text too much since it can sound POV.
attributing this to West's great ear for talent in the variety of musicians and artists- I would the last quote here, too. I think the important point is delivered with the first part alone
Musically, 'God Is' is a gospel song- per the Variety source you could add something like ", one of the more traditional on Jesus Is King".
West sings in a hoarse voice- it would be more accurate to the source to change this to "increasingly hoarse voice".
while also praising the cinematics- I would change this to "cinematic elements" since it might be sligthly unclear
Aidy James Stevens felt moved by the song from his position of atheism- I think changing to "despite his position of atheism" would better reflect what Stevens is trying to say
number six on both the Christian Songs and Gospel Songs charts" - Gospel peak was 4
This was a short review; the article is very good! I'm a fan of the composition and lyrics, its very concise which tends to be a fun bonus of smaller non-single songs like this. All issues should be relatively easy to fix. IanTEB ( talk) 17:50, 16 June 2024 (UTC)
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Nominator: Kyle Peake ( talk · contribs) 21:07, 29 May 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: IanTEB ( talk · contribs) 17:50, 16 June 2024 (UTC)
Sorry it took so long to return a review to you. This one looks interesting so I'll give it a shot!
although he said West and his group 'were really cool'- You can cut this since his opinion on the group already comes across with the text before it.
whom he described as 'amazing artists'- I would cut the last quote since it isn't too relevant to this specific song. I try to watch using this kind of text too much since it can sound POV.
attributing this to West's great ear for talent in the variety of musicians and artists- I would the last quote here, too. I think the important point is delivered with the first part alone
Musically, 'God Is' is a gospel song- per the Variety source you could add something like ", one of the more traditional on Jesus Is King".
West sings in a hoarse voice- it would be more accurate to the source to change this to "increasingly hoarse voice".
while also praising the cinematics- I would change this to "cinematic elements" since it might be sligthly unclear
Aidy James Stevens felt moved by the song from his position of atheism- I think changing to "despite his position of atheism" would better reflect what Stevens is trying to say
number six on both the Christian Songs and Gospel Songs charts" - Gospel peak was 4
This was a short review; the article is very good! I'm a fan of the composition and lyrics, its very concise which tends to be a fun bonus of smaller non-single songs like this. All issues should be relatively easy to fix. IanTEB ( talk) 17:50, 16 June 2024 (UTC)