Hi
RightCowLeftCoast, I will pick this one up. I intend to copy edit the article before commencing the assessment proper; let me know if you have any issues with this. Obviously, you are free to revert any edits I might make that you are not happy with.
Gog the Mild (
talk)
15:15, 13 May 2019 (UTC)reply
"which receives water and other runoff" Querying what "other runoff" might be other than water? If you mean 'sewage' it may be better to say so.
"Numerous sensitive and endangered species" The use of "sensitive" is unclear here. Could you qualify?
"It remained in the ownership of the Knox Family until at least 1981, but was out of their control due to government control beginning in 1970." I'm not sure how the homestead can be in the family's control until 1981 and be under government control from 1970?
Fair enough. And you mention sewage later in the lead.
"Sensitive" species is defined for the context of one of the reliable sources of the article
here. So formerly endangered and threatened species, and those species listed below the federal level, by the state, local, or enviromental groups. Should this be included directly in the article, or a note be included? Apparently this is
common due to environmental regulation.
I understand what you are trying to communicate, but I think that many readers will be scratching their heads wondering what a "sensitive species" is. And how it is different to an "endangered" one. I can't find a relevant Wikilink, do you know of one?
Not a typo, in the early 1980s the part of Goat Canyon on the Mexican side of the border, was not heavily populated, and thus "not a significant contributor" of sewage.
OK.
I have
modified that sentence to remove "zeroed out"
@
Gog the Mild: There does not appear to be an article about sensitive species, or an article which includes it significantly as a section of it. Other articles include the terminology but without significant explanation or definition. Therefore, I have included a note regarding the term, please see
this diff for that addition to the article.
Hi
RightCowLeftCoast, I will pick this one up. I intend to copy edit the article before commencing the assessment proper; let me know if you have any issues with this. Obviously, you are free to revert any edits I might make that you are not happy with.
Gog the Mild (
talk)
15:15, 13 May 2019 (UTC)reply
"which receives water and other runoff" Querying what "other runoff" might be other than water? If you mean 'sewage' it may be better to say so.
"Numerous sensitive and endangered species" The use of "sensitive" is unclear here. Could you qualify?
"It remained in the ownership of the Knox Family until at least 1981, but was out of their control due to government control beginning in 1970." I'm not sure how the homestead can be in the family's control until 1981 and be under government control from 1970?
Fair enough. And you mention sewage later in the lead.
"Sensitive" species is defined for the context of one of the reliable sources of the article
here. So formerly endangered and threatened species, and those species listed below the federal level, by the state, local, or enviromental groups. Should this be included directly in the article, or a note be included? Apparently this is
common due to environmental regulation.
I understand what you are trying to communicate, but I think that many readers will be scratching their heads wondering what a "sensitive species" is. And how it is different to an "endangered" one. I can't find a relevant Wikilink, do you know of one?
Not a typo, in the early 1980s the part of Goat Canyon on the Mexican side of the border, was not heavily populated, and thus "not a significant contributor" of sewage.
OK.
I have
modified that sentence to remove "zeroed out"
@
Gog the Mild: There does not appear to be an article about sensitive species, or an article which includes it significantly as a section of it. Other articles include the terminology but without significant explanation or definition. Therefore, I have included a note regarding the term, please see
this diff for that addition to the article.