The Lead does not meet the guidelines of
WP:LEAD - The lead section should briefly summarize the most important points covered in an article in such a way that it can stand on its own as a concise version of the article.' Done
There are a large number of red links. If no one is going to write these articles, perhaps they should be de-wikified. Optional
There is nothing in ref #6
[1], to support the statement ... built himself the first television set in the state of Georgia
ref #12 needs page numbers
All other online sources check out
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
There is nothing about the subject's origins, place and date of birth, upbringing before Georgia Tech. Have no biographies been published? Is there no US Census data available?
Okay. Added page numbers for that one ref in html comments; greatly expanded the lead; and added the "claims to have built." As for the birth/origins/upbringing, I haven't found any such information, and I wouldn't know where to look in the census. —
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02:22, 3 April 2010 (UTC)reply
The Lead does not meet the guidelines of
WP:LEAD - The lead section should briefly summarize the most important points covered in an article in such a way that it can stand on its own as a concise version of the article.' Done
There are a large number of red links. If no one is going to write these articles, perhaps they should be de-wikified. Optional
There is nothing in ref #6
[1], to support the statement ... built himself the first television set in the state of Georgia
ref #12 needs page numbers
All other online sources check out
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
There is nothing about the subject's origins, place and date of birth, upbringing before Georgia Tech. Have no biographies been published? Is there no US Census data available?
Okay. Added page numbers for that one ref in html comments; greatly expanded the lead; and added the "claims to have built." As for the birth/origins/upbringing, I haven't found any such information, and I wouldn't know where to look in the census. —
Disavian (
talk/
contribs)
02:22, 3 April 2010 (UTC)reply