OK - I'll begin a list of fixes for GA status here: cheers, Casliber ( talk · contribs) 08:24, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
::However, by the 1990s, there had been a significant resurgence in Glasgow's economic fortunes, as the city found a new role as a European centre for business services and finance, as well as benefiting from an increase in tourism and inward investment. - don't need a comma before the 'as' maybe better to have two sentences with a semicolon between.
In Economy section:
::Glasgow is the largest and most dynamic economy in Scotland - not sure but 'dynamic' may be too subjective sounding? thriving better?
::Some of the high-rise developments were poorly designed and cheaply built and became magnets for crime. Over time some have become as bad as the slum areas that they replaced, though at the time of construction they were largely welcomed. - problematic - magnets could be replaced by more formal word, and 'bad' should be replaced my a more exact adjective - crime-ridden or whatever you want to get across.
::...Glasgow's gay scene... - is this the most politically correct way to phrase this? Maybe 'gay and lesbian' is better. Actually the paragraph could be written in a wee bit more formal tone.
In The West End - fix cite tags.
Overall the prose is OK and this should pass GA readily as the stuff above is straightofrward. Good work so far. WRT working towards FAC, the prose needs some more polishing - need to watch repetition of 'Glasgow' and look to reduce this without introducing ambiguity. There are alot of stubby paras in the last few sections that aren't deal-breakers for GA but would be for FA. Good luck. cheers, Casliber ( talk · contribs) 11:05, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
Hello. I am the one who nominated the article for GA but I did not write the article. I tried to fix some of the issues you pointed out even though my English is not very good. If everything is OK can you please pass this. Otherwise strike the issues that I fixed and find the people who wrote the article. Tell them to fix the other issues. -- Kaypoh ( talk) 08:46, 10 December 2007 (UTC)
I've found another issue- the references are badly formatted. I'l fix them tomorrow, unless someone wishes to go first and save me the trouble. Lurker ( said · done) 17:27, 10 December 2007 (UTC)
OK, in summary I think whatever minor bits and pieces are not dealbreakers for GA status. This is shaping up rather nicely for a crack at FA at some stage. For this it needs:
Good luck whoever takes it on. cheers, Casliber ( talk · contribs) 11:40, 14 December 2007 (UTC)
OK - I'll begin a list of fixes for GA status here: cheers, Casliber ( talk · contribs) 08:24, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
::However, by the 1990s, there had been a significant resurgence in Glasgow's economic fortunes, as the city found a new role as a European centre for business services and finance, as well as benefiting from an increase in tourism and inward investment. - don't need a comma before the 'as' maybe better to have two sentences with a semicolon between.
In Economy section:
::Glasgow is the largest and most dynamic economy in Scotland - not sure but 'dynamic' may be too subjective sounding? thriving better?
::Some of the high-rise developments were poorly designed and cheaply built and became magnets for crime. Over time some have become as bad as the slum areas that they replaced, though at the time of construction they were largely welcomed. - problematic - magnets could be replaced by more formal word, and 'bad' should be replaced my a more exact adjective - crime-ridden or whatever you want to get across.
::...Glasgow's gay scene... - is this the most politically correct way to phrase this? Maybe 'gay and lesbian' is better. Actually the paragraph could be written in a wee bit more formal tone.
In The West End - fix cite tags.
Overall the prose is OK and this should pass GA readily as the stuff above is straightofrward. Good work so far. WRT working towards FAC, the prose needs some more polishing - need to watch repetition of 'Glasgow' and look to reduce this without introducing ambiguity. There are alot of stubby paras in the last few sections that aren't deal-breakers for GA but would be for FA. Good luck. cheers, Casliber ( talk · contribs) 11:05, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
Hello. I am the one who nominated the article for GA but I did not write the article. I tried to fix some of the issues you pointed out even though my English is not very good. If everything is OK can you please pass this. Otherwise strike the issues that I fixed and find the people who wrote the article. Tell them to fix the other issues. -- Kaypoh ( talk) 08:46, 10 December 2007 (UTC)
I've found another issue- the references are badly formatted. I'l fix them tomorrow, unless someone wishes to go first and save me the trouble. Lurker ( said · done) 17:27, 10 December 2007 (UTC)
OK, in summary I think whatever minor bits and pieces are not dealbreakers for GA status. This is shaping up rather nicely for a crack at FA at some stage. For this it needs:
Good luck whoever takes it on. cheers, Casliber ( talk · contribs) 11:40, 14 December 2007 (UTC)