This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 16 January 2024 and 9 May 2024. Further details are available
on the course page. Student editor(s):
Khianaroraback (
article contribs).
— Assignment last updated by Khianaroraback ( talk) 02:04, 2 May 2024 (UTC)
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Nominator: PSA ( talk · contribs) 04:55, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Mike Christie ( talk · contribs) 16:47, 9 June 2024 (UTC)
I'll review this.
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16:47, 9 June 2024 (UTC)
Earwig shows no issues. Spotchecks (footnote numbers refer to this version):
Phoebe pulled up a week or two later, and she's in the studio with us, and we're just chatting for, you know, a couple hours or something, just catching the vibe ... 'I don't know if it's good if you guys hate it, I won't take it personally and I can just do some like ethereal background vocals or something like that,' and we're like 'it's gonna be fine, like why don't we just hear what you got.' And she steps out into the booth and just like literally top to bottom things that. That verse like exactly as it is. [We] cut it at one point, but, but lyrically and melodically, it's identical to the very first take." (Noting that I removed several instances of the word "like" as a filler world)
I'll pause there until you've fixed the spotcheck issue and will do another couple of spotchecks then. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 17:13, 9 June 2024 (UTC)
Hello! I was originally planning to review this article before Mike Christie began their review, so I have a few notes left over I was going to bring up if that's okay. – SupremeLordBagel ( talk to me) 03:09, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
She described "Ghost in the Machine" as "super alternative and strange". – SupremeLordBagel ( talk to me) 03:09, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
with SZA craving for more humanity from everyoneis a little awkward and could be rephrased. SupremeLordBagel ( talk to me) 05:34, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
while John Amen of Beats Per Minute wrote that the song's construction was rooted in...". SupremeLordBagel ( talk to me) 06:13, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Thanks for posting these notes, SupremeLordBagel; I appreciate it. I'm happy to check on the responses from the nominator when they reply, or if you like you can work with them on these points -- your call. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 13:12, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Sources are reliable. The following prose suggestions are mostly just that -- suggestions -- so please push back if you disagree with anything. I'm doing a little copyediting as I read through; please revert anything you don't like.
That's it for a read-through; I'll have another look when these are addressed. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 00:57, 12 June 2024 (UTC)
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 16 January 2024 and 9 May 2024. Further details are available
on the course page. Student editor(s):
Khianaroraback (
article contribs).
— Assignment last updated by Khianaroraback ( talk) 02:04, 2 May 2024 (UTC)
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Reviewing |
Nominator: PSA ( talk · contribs) 04:55, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Mike Christie ( talk · contribs) 16:47, 9 June 2024 (UTC)
I'll review this.
Mike Christie (
talk -
contribs -
library)
16:47, 9 June 2024 (UTC)
Earwig shows no issues. Spotchecks (footnote numbers refer to this version):
Phoebe pulled up a week or two later, and she's in the studio with us, and we're just chatting for, you know, a couple hours or something, just catching the vibe ... 'I don't know if it's good if you guys hate it, I won't take it personally and I can just do some like ethereal background vocals or something like that,' and we're like 'it's gonna be fine, like why don't we just hear what you got.' And she steps out into the booth and just like literally top to bottom things that. That verse like exactly as it is. [We] cut it at one point, but, but lyrically and melodically, it's identical to the very first take." (Noting that I removed several instances of the word "like" as a filler world)
I'll pause there until you've fixed the spotcheck issue and will do another couple of spotchecks then. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 17:13, 9 June 2024 (UTC)
Hello! I was originally planning to review this article before Mike Christie began their review, so I have a few notes left over I was going to bring up if that's okay. – SupremeLordBagel ( talk to me) 03:09, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
She described "Ghost in the Machine" as "super alternative and strange". – SupremeLordBagel ( talk to me) 03:09, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
with SZA craving for more humanity from everyoneis a little awkward and could be rephrased. SupremeLordBagel ( talk to me) 05:34, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
while John Amen of Beats Per Minute wrote that the song's construction was rooted in...". SupremeLordBagel ( talk to me) 06:13, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Thanks for posting these notes, SupremeLordBagel; I appreciate it. I'm happy to check on the responses from the nominator when they reply, or if you like you can work with them on these points -- your call. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 13:12, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Sources are reliable. The following prose suggestions are mostly just that -- suggestions -- so please push back if you disagree with anything. I'm doing a little copyediting as I read through; please revert anything you don't like.
That's it for a read-through; I'll have another look when these are addressed. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 00:57, 12 June 2024 (UTC)