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Reviewer: The Rambling Man ( talk · contribs) 20:58, 18 November 2018 (UTC)
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- In general the lead feels a little lightweight for this article.
- Beefed up the lede. Ergo Sum 06:08, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- You call it The Car Barn in the lead, that (
The Car Barn) doesn't redirect back here, what's it's common name and if it's something other than the current title, maybe we need to look at moving it, and even perhaps creating a redirect or two to cater for alternative names. (e.g. should it be "Car Barn, Georgetown"?)
- The common name is Car Barn or The Car Barn. However, this is ambiguous, so to disambiguate it, rather than go with a comma-separate or parenthetical disambiguation, I went with a natural disambiguation by choosing a name which is utilized but is not the most common name: Georgetown Car Barn. Whether The Car Barn should redirect here, I think, depends on whether Car barn should do so, which it seems it shouldn't. If there happened to be a disambiguation page of buildings called car barns, certainly that might be a different story about whether those two links should redirect to that. Ergo Sum 06:33, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- Given you note the Exorcist steps in the lead, I'm a little surprised not to see an image of them in the article.
- My hesitation to include a picture is because there really isn't much room to do so and that it has its own article. Do you think it's vital to have a picture of the steps?
Ergo Sum
06:12, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- I think since it has prominence in the lead, it would be good to do so. I understand your reservations...
The Rambling Man (
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10:50, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- @ The Rambling Man: I've added a photo of the steps and reorganized the existing ones to accommodate it. Ergo Sum 21:40, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- I think since it has prominence in the lead, it would be good to do so. I understand your reservations...
The Rambling Man (
talk)
10:50, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- My hesitation to include a picture is because there really isn't much room to do so and that it has its own article. Do you think it's vital to have a picture of the steps?
Ergo Sum
06:12, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- "On the foundation on which the Car Barn" just one of those "on" will do, preferably the latter.
- "built ... built" in that sentence, quickly repetitive.
- I think you need to link "trolleys" as where I come from they're nothing to do with trolleycars...
- "Construction on Union Station began" it went from being "a union station" to "Union Station" in one sentence. Was it referred to as that (hence the capitalisation)?
- Clarified. Per the source, it seems that for a short time, early on, it was properly known as Union Station. Ergo Sum 06:18, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- "known as the Exorcist steps and" I think you can expand on that a tiny bit.
- " wainscot panelling" wainscot is piped to a redirect, ironically to panelling, so I'd just pipe "wainscot panelling" to "panelling".
- "first floor would serve the" this seems a USEng proclivity, the "would serve" instead of simply "served", why not the latter?
- Done. That is better. Ergo Sum 06:24, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- "experienced steady deterioration." steady? or just "continual"?
- "The building today is four floors and has a floor ..."-> "The building today hass four floors with a total floor ..."
That's pretty much all I have so I'll put it on hold for now. The Rambling Man ( talk) 21:29, 18 November 2018 (UTC)
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The Rambling Man: Thank you for your comments. I believe I've responded to them.
Ergo Sum
06:35, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- Happy with these changes, and I think the title is fine, so I'm promoting to GA. Good work. The Rambling Man ( talk) 21:54, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man ( talk · contribs) 20:58, 18 November 2018 (UTC)
Comments
- In general the lead feels a little lightweight for this article.
- Beefed up the lede. Ergo Sum 06:08, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- You call it The Car Barn in the lead, that (
The Car Barn) doesn't redirect back here, what's it's common name and if it's something other than the current title, maybe we need to look at moving it, and even perhaps creating a redirect or two to cater for alternative names. (e.g. should it be "Car Barn, Georgetown"?)
- The common name is Car Barn or The Car Barn. However, this is ambiguous, so to disambiguate it, rather than go with a comma-separate or parenthetical disambiguation, I went with a natural disambiguation by choosing a name which is utilized but is not the most common name: Georgetown Car Barn. Whether The Car Barn should redirect here, I think, depends on whether Car barn should do so, which it seems it shouldn't. If there happened to be a disambiguation page of buildings called car barns, certainly that might be a different story about whether those two links should redirect to that. Ergo Sum 06:33, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- Given you note the Exorcist steps in the lead, I'm a little surprised not to see an image of them in the article.
- My hesitation to include a picture is because there really isn't much room to do so and that it has its own article. Do you think it's vital to have a picture of the steps?
Ergo Sum
06:12, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- I think since it has prominence in the lead, it would be good to do so. I understand your reservations...
The Rambling Man (
talk)
10:50, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- @ The Rambling Man: I've added a photo of the steps and reorganized the existing ones to accommodate it. Ergo Sum 21:40, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- I think since it has prominence in the lead, it would be good to do so. I understand your reservations...
The Rambling Man (
talk)
10:50, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- My hesitation to include a picture is because there really isn't much room to do so and that it has its own article. Do you think it's vital to have a picture of the steps?
Ergo Sum
06:12, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- "On the foundation on which the Car Barn" just one of those "on" will do, preferably the latter.
- "built ... built" in that sentence, quickly repetitive.
- I think you need to link "trolleys" as where I come from they're nothing to do with trolleycars...
- "Construction on Union Station began" it went from being "a union station" to "Union Station" in one sentence. Was it referred to as that (hence the capitalisation)?
- Clarified. Per the source, it seems that for a short time, early on, it was properly known as Union Station. Ergo Sum 06:18, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- "known as the Exorcist steps and" I think you can expand on that a tiny bit.
- " wainscot panelling" wainscot is piped to a redirect, ironically to panelling, so I'd just pipe "wainscot panelling" to "panelling".
- "first floor would serve the" this seems a USEng proclivity, the "would serve" instead of simply "served", why not the latter?
- Done. That is better. Ergo Sum 06:24, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- "experienced steady deterioration." steady? or just "continual"?
- "The building today is four floors and has a floor ..."-> "The building today hass four floors with a total floor ..."
That's pretty much all I have so I'll put it on hold for now. The Rambling Man ( talk) 21:29, 18 November 2018 (UTC)
- @
The Rambling Man: Thank you for your comments. I believe I've responded to them.
Ergo Sum
06:35, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
- Happy with these changes, and I think the title is fine, so I'm promoting to GA. Good work. The Rambling Man ( talk) 21:54, 21 November 2018 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.