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Reviewer: Canadian Paul 05:34, 22 March 2011 (UTC)
I will be reviewing this article in the near future, hopefully tomorrow. Canadian Paul 05:34, 22 March 2011 (UTC)
...and here it is!
An overall problem that I have with this article is that it doesn't seem to be as much an article on Odlum as it is on politics in Saint Lucia during this era. While it's important to have some of this information as context and background, I came away from reading this with a better sense of the Saint Lucian political scene than I did with a sense of who the individual is. A contributing factor to this is the sources - they're mostly obituaries - which means they are going to focus more on the a few key contextualized events rather than the more intimate details. Here's an example from the first paragraph of "Ambassador and Foreign Minister":
"Now outside Parliament, Odlum maintained his presence in the public eye through meetings and the work of his newspaper, The Crusader."
But then we move immediately to another topic. It leaves me wondering - what kind of meetings did he hold? What did his newspaper publish? Did he pull certain stunts that helped keep him in the public eye and, if so, what were they? You don't have to answer all of those questions, or even any of them, but those are the types of questions that could be answered to give this article more of a sense of the individual. The next two sentences cover his entire life over the next decade... did he do nothing worth writing about between 1987 and 1995? What were his accomplishments as UN ambassador? There's a lot of interesting stuff in the "Legacy" section, so where's the detail on it in the body? The article is very well written, but also missing a lot, so I am going to put the article on hold for a period of up to seven days so that changes can be made. I'm always open to discussion, so if you think I'm wrong on something leave your thoughts here and we'll discuss. I'll be checking this page at least daily, unless something comes up in real life, so you can be sure I'll notice any comments left here. Canadian Paul 05:37, 23 March 2011 (UTC)
George Odlum has been listed as one of the Social sciences and society good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it. | ||||||||||
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A fact from this article was featured on Wikipedia's Main Page in the " On this day..." column on September 28, 2020. |
This article is rated GA-class on Wikipedia's
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Reviewing |
Reviewer: Canadian Paul 05:34, 22 March 2011 (UTC)
I will be reviewing this article in the near future, hopefully tomorrow. Canadian Paul 05:34, 22 March 2011 (UTC)
...and here it is!
An overall problem that I have with this article is that it doesn't seem to be as much an article on Odlum as it is on politics in Saint Lucia during this era. While it's important to have some of this information as context and background, I came away from reading this with a better sense of the Saint Lucian political scene than I did with a sense of who the individual is. A contributing factor to this is the sources - they're mostly obituaries - which means they are going to focus more on the a few key contextualized events rather than the more intimate details. Here's an example from the first paragraph of "Ambassador and Foreign Minister":
"Now outside Parliament, Odlum maintained his presence in the public eye through meetings and the work of his newspaper, The Crusader."
But then we move immediately to another topic. It leaves me wondering - what kind of meetings did he hold? What did his newspaper publish? Did he pull certain stunts that helped keep him in the public eye and, if so, what were they? You don't have to answer all of those questions, or even any of them, but those are the types of questions that could be answered to give this article more of a sense of the individual. The next two sentences cover his entire life over the next decade... did he do nothing worth writing about between 1987 and 1995? What were his accomplishments as UN ambassador? There's a lot of interesting stuff in the "Legacy" section, so where's the detail on it in the body? The article is very well written, but also missing a lot, so I am going to put the article on hold for a period of up to seven days so that changes can be made. I'm always open to discussion, so if you think I'm wrong on something leave your thoughts here and we'll discuss. I'll be checking this page at least daily, unless something comes up in real life, so you can be sure I'll notice any comments left here. Canadian Paul 05:37, 23 March 2011 (UTC)