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The article looks good. I went ahead and made a lot of the edits in the document, but here are a few suggestions for revision.
Nelson Gladwell ( talk) 03:12, 18 April 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for looking over my article. I appreciate the suggestions. It’s always nice to have someone read over your work to pull out things that could be improved. SioneF ( talk) 04:37, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
The article was very informative. I have a few brief suggestions:
“Women have equal access to health care,[2] and the life expectancy rate is 69 for women. [3]” I would suggest providing the life expectancy for Tongan men here. It gives us a point of reference.
“Gender Norms” section, paragraph 2: Husbands have a higher rank than their wives, but sisters hold rank over their brothers. When does this change occur? Is it at a certain age that women are deemed inferior to their male counterparts? Or when they are married?
“In 2010, men working in agriculture or fisheries earned about $5 pa'anga per hour, while women working in handicrafts and service industries made about $2 per hour. [2]” Tongan currency or US dollars? Make sure it matches.
Mtdillman ( talk) 02:42, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for looking over my article. One of my concerns was the fact that being Tongan, I would take for granted some information and not explain it clearly enough for someone not familiar with Tongan culture to understand. I appreciate your feedback in how I can explain cultural things better to improve the clarity of my article.
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04:37, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
This is a very informative article. It covers the basic issues of concern in understanding gender inequality in Tonga. You do need to add year to sentences that report statistics. The GII section is good as a general overview (and your use of the 2013 HDR is commendable!). If possible, however, could you discuss education, health, and political participation in greater depth (have separate sections for each, at the same level as "Legal Framework")? For this to happen, you would need to locate and discuss some more statistics. BerikG ( talk) 21:47, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
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The article looks good. I went ahead and made a lot of the edits in the document, but here are a few suggestions for revision.
Nelson Gladwell ( talk) 03:12, 18 April 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for looking over my article. I appreciate the suggestions. It’s always nice to have someone read over your work to pull out things that could be improved. SioneF ( talk) 04:37, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
The article was very informative. I have a few brief suggestions:
“Women have equal access to health care,[2] and the life expectancy rate is 69 for women. [3]” I would suggest providing the life expectancy for Tongan men here. It gives us a point of reference.
“Gender Norms” section, paragraph 2: Husbands have a higher rank than their wives, but sisters hold rank over their brothers. When does this change occur? Is it at a certain age that women are deemed inferior to their male counterparts? Or when they are married?
“In 2010, men working in agriculture or fisheries earned about $5 pa'anga per hour, while women working in handicrafts and service industries made about $2 per hour. [2]” Tongan currency or US dollars? Make sure it matches.
Mtdillman ( talk) 02:42, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for looking over my article. One of my concerns was the fact that being Tongan, I would take for granted some information and not explain it clearly enough for someone not familiar with Tongan culture to understand. I appreciate your feedback in how I can explain cultural things better to improve the clarity of my article.
SioneF (
talk)
04:37, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
This is a very informative article. It covers the basic issues of concern in understanding gender inequality in Tonga. You do need to add year to sentences that report statistics. The GII section is good as a general overview (and your use of the 2013 HDR is commendable!). If possible, however, could you discuss education, health, and political participation in greater depth (have separate sections for each, at the same level as "Legal Framework")? For this to happen, you would need to locate and discuss some more statistics. BerikG ( talk) 21:47, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
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