The College career section could use some reorganization. The first sentence talks about his All-Big Ten Conference selections in particular years; these mentions would work better at the end of the paragraphs mentioning each of those seasons. The second paragraph, on his career records, would go better at the end of the section, when these career marks would have been finalized.
The individual season paragraphs talk about highlighted moments in his career, which is good, but don't give a feel for how he was performing day-to-day. A year-by-year statistics table might help here.
You don't need to link both the overall season and the Michigan football team each year; I'd just link the individual Michigan seasons, since they link to the overall NCAA seasons.
The Pro career season needs expansion. How did he perform in the two Arena Leagues? Why was he cut by the Buccaneers? Another statistical table would help greatly.
A pro career table seems like it may be hard to produce. I do not know of any public sources. The AF2 has disbanded and only the most recent season stats are available online. I don't know how to find 2008.--
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Thanks for responding and dealing with all issues in a timely fashion. I am passing this article as a Good Article. Congratulations! –Grondemar04:35, 7 October 2010 (UTC)reply
The College career section could use some reorganization. The first sentence talks about his All-Big Ten Conference selections in particular years; these mentions would work better at the end of the paragraphs mentioning each of those seasons. The second paragraph, on his career records, would go better at the end of the section, when these career marks would have been finalized.
The individual season paragraphs talk about highlighted moments in his career, which is good, but don't give a feel for how he was performing day-to-day. A year-by-year statistics table might help here.
You don't need to link both the overall season and the Michigan football team each year; I'd just link the individual Michigan seasons, since they link to the overall NCAA seasons.
The Pro career season needs expansion. How did he perform in the two Arena Leagues? Why was he cut by the Buccaneers? Another statistical table would help greatly.
A pro career table seems like it may be hard to produce. I do not know of any public sources. The AF2 has disbanded and only the most recent season stats are available online. I don't know how to find 2008.--
TonyTheTiger (
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19:58, 5 October 2010 (UTC)reply
This article will be on hold for seven days to allow for the addressing of the above. Note that due to the large number of nominations you currently have in-queue, I will be enforcing this seven-day time limit more strictly that in past reviews.
Thanks for responding and dealing with all issues in a timely fashion. I am passing this article as a Good Article. Congratulations! –Grondemar04:35, 7 October 2010 (UTC)reply