The prose is good enough, but there are a number of single sentences and short paragraphs which should be concatenated.
Expanded the lead. Wasn't sure about citations of material which is cited later, so please let me know if I need to fix anything. Also changed some things around to combine sentences and paragraphs. Hopefully it's an improvement. --
Cerebellum (
talk)
04:36, 2 March 2011 (UTC)reply
OK, on hold for seven days. Combine short stray sentences and paragraphs, cite the POV statements, and make the lead a concise summary of the article as per
WP:LEAD.
Jezhotwells (
talk)
20:21, 1 March 2011 (UTC)reply
The prose is good enough, but there are a number of single sentences and short paragraphs which should be concatenated.
Expanded the lead. Wasn't sure about citations of material which is cited later, so please let me know if I need to fix anything. Also changed some things around to combine sentences and paragraphs. Hopefully it's an improvement. --
Cerebellum (
talk)
04:36, 2 March 2011 (UTC)reply
OK, on hold for seven days. Combine short stray sentences and paragraphs, cite the POV statements, and make the lead a concise summary of the article as per
WP:LEAD.
Jezhotwells (
talk)
20:21, 1 March 2011 (UTC)reply