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Reviewer: CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 01:33, 7 March 2011 (UTC) reply

Lead

• Remove "the"
• as the fifth and final single from ...Baby One More Time -> the album. You used the title already a few words ago
• for selling over 50,000 physical units of the single -> ? Platinum is 1 million
• setted Spears -> setted?
• the song on the 42nd Grammy Awards -> at the

The whole thing  Done - Sauloviegas ( talk) 04:13, 7 March 2011 (UTC) reply

Background

• Again, try and tie in the sentences so it reads more fluently and flows better. Also, I feel there is more info you can add.

Composition

• Good, but try and expand a bit

Hey, I've merged the two sections. They were merged before, I unmerged them because I thought there was enough info to do so. I've been searching for infos about the background and composition of the song since December, and I couldn't find anything else... Sorry... :( - Sauloviegas ( talk) 04:13, 7 March 2011 (UTC) reply

Reception

• It didn't peak at 52, it debuted

 Done - Sauloviegas ( talk) 04:13, 7 March 2011 (UTC) reply

Music video

• Was directed
• The video portrays Spears
• Fix up tense issues

 Done - Sauloviegas ( talk) 04:13, 7 March 2011 (UTC) reply

Live performances

• Kitted?

Was wearing. - Sauloviegas ( talk) 04:13, 7 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• Enormous fans? NPOV

Hand fans. - Sauloviegas ( talk) 04:13, 7 March 2011 (UTC) reply

References

• 1. 2 & 4 are linked twice

 Done - Sauloviegas ( talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• 1. 8 needs linking and publishers

 Done - Sauloviegas ( talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• 1. 9, #10, #11 need linking and publishers etc.

 Done - Sauloviegas ( talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• 1. 11 needs work

 Done - Sauloviegas ( talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• 1. 13 not reliable

Archived from the original. - Sauloviegas ( talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• 1. 14 needs work

 Done - Sauloviegas ( talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• 1. 16 again linking

 Done - Sauloviegas ( talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• 1. 17 & #18 need linking, italics and publishers

 Done - Sauloviegas ( talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• 1. 20 linking

 Done - Sauloviegas ( talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• 1. 21 Youtube does not belong on Wikipedia

Removed. - Sauloviegas ( talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• 1. 25 linking, publisher

 Done - Sauloviegas ( talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• 1. 30 needs some work

Generated automatically by Wikipedia. Can't change it. - Sauloviegas ( talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• • Overall I feel this article as well is a bit rushed. Aside from the facts, there is no compelling or background info on the song. I feel there is more info you could add. Nice work though! :)-- CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 02:49, 7 March 2011 (UTC) reply

• • • Passing. Much better!-- CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 10:25, 13 March 2011 (UTC) reply