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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 ( talk · contribs) 04:12, 28 May 2019 (UTC) reply

This article is in good shape. A few comments from me:

• in the lead, suggest "and later the Germans"→"and was later seized by the Germans"
  • How about "taken" instead of repeating "seize"?
• "attempting to produce a satisfactory design to fill 70,000 tons as allowed by the treaty" does this mean to accommodate two or three ships within the 70K or something else?
  • Yeah, the intention was to build multiple ships - the 17,500-tonners would have allowed 4 ships to be built within the allotted tonnage
    • How about "attempting to produce a satisfactory design which would allow several ships to be built within the 70,000-ton limit allowed by the treaty"? Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 00:29, 29 May 2019 (UTC) reply
      • Works for me. Parsecboy ( talk) 09:20, 29 May 2019 (UTC) reply
• link battlecruiser
  • Done
• suggest sigfig=2 for the protected cruiser gun conversions
  • Fixed
• drop the second conversion of 305 mm
  • Done
• knots in full and linked at first mention
  • Done
• convert the 330 mm guns
  • Done
• link ship class
  • Done
• suggest "final Dunkerque"→"final Dunkerque-class design" there is another instance of this
  • Works for me
• suggest sigfig'ing the beam conversion to get rid of the decimal place
  • Fixed
• the secondary battery description in the infobox isn't clear
  • Fixed
• perhaps describe the layout of the rear quad turrets, as this seems a unique set-up
  • Good idea
• suggest stating that the twin turrets were on the sides just forward of the funnel
  • Done
• if you convert 330 mm earlier, you could drop the conversion of the turret armour
  • Done

More to come. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 04:30, 28 May 2019 (UTC) reply

• it is a bit off-putting that both 280 mm and 270 mm round to 11 in, could you go an extra sigfig?
  • Good catch
• you could link desk (ship) but perhaps it is too common a term
  • Nah, that's a good link
• "That day, she was docked" dry-docked? and link?
  • Good idea
• link Brittany?
  • Done
• suggest linking light cruiser and destroyer
  • Good catch
• "pocket battleship"s→"pocket battleships"
  • Fixed
• "ordered his ships to return to point" port?
  • Good catch
• link Béarn and say what sort of ship she was
  • Done
• suggest linking heavy cruiser
  • Done
• suggest being consistent with the diacritic on Mers-el-Kébir
  • Fixed
• say who Darlan was and link
  • Good catch
• "On 5 November, Strasbourg, all all of the cruisers"
  • Fixed
• "She had to be docked for repairs" dry-docked?
  • Sure
• suggest "The vesselStrasbourg appeared to be undamaged"
  • Done
• Seaforth Punblishing
  • Whoops!
• the licensing of File:Croiseur de bataille Strasbourg 03-07-1940.jpg isn't right
  • I don't know about that - it appears to have been uploaded by the creator's descendant, and they'd be the holders of the copyright for a private photo, so they can release it as far as I'm aware.
    • Doh. Totally missed that. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 00:31, 29 May 2019 (UTC) reply
• is there a source for the ship movement/attack info on File:Attack on Mers-el-Kébir map-es.svg?
  • It's very clearly based on the map Jordan & Dumas have in their book, I've added it to the description page.

That's me done. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 06:32, 28 May 2019 (UTC) reply

Thanks PM. Parsecboy ( talk) 14:36, 28 May 2019 (UTC) reply

This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by an appropriately licensed image with an appropriate caption. Passing. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 09:37, 29 May 2019 (UTC) reply