GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (
|
visual edit |
history) ·
Article talk (
|
history) ·
Watch
Reviewer: Cirt ( talk · contribs) 18:01, 24 December 2013 (UTC)
The pull quote blue box might look a bit better aligned on the right side instead of the left. — Cirt ( talk) 05:05, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
Could a few more entries be added to other relevant articles in the See also sect? Right now it's got zero links but just the portal, which is a good link though. :) — Cirt ( talk) 05:05, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
I strongly suggest modifying entire article so it is all in one tense style for tense uniformity. I recommend using past tense, throughout the entire article, for ease of readability, flow, and comprehension for both readers and editors, alike. — Cirt ( talk) 05:05, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
Citation 2 is to this link http://www.amazon.com/Norman-Rockwells-Four-Freedoms-Inspire/dp/0936399422 which is to Amazon.com.
There are much better citations that could be used for this info, I'm not sure why a hyperlink to Amazon.com is being used here.
Please replace this cite with a better quality cite, to a secondary source that satisfies WP:RS and WP:V.
Thank you,
— Cirt ( talk) 05:10, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
Please spell out full date format for all cites so they have uniformity. Some use 2013-12-29, others use December 29, 2013. Please use the latter, throughout, thanks. — Cirt ( talk) 22:15, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
^ "Norman Rockwell in the 1940s: A View of the American Homefront". Norman Rockwell Museum. Retrieved 2008-04-12.[dead link]
This cite has a dead link, please fix, thank you.
While you're at it, please recheck and update accessdates for all cites that have hyperlinks.
— Cirt ( talk) 22:15, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
Jump up ^ "I Like To Please People". Time magazine. Time Inc. 1943-06-21. Retrieved 2008-04-12.
This cite could be fleshed out a bit more. Same issue with date format. Full title has word "Art" in front of title. Date should be given as June 21, 1943. http://content.time.com/time/magazine/article/0,9171,766759,00.html appears to be behind a paywall, I think there is a template to note that in the citation.
Please also double check all cites are formatted with WP:CIT templates for both standardization and uniformity. — Cirt ( talk) 22:15, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
I have a concern that not enough research has been done to cover the preponderance of secondary source references available to fully give the article breadth of coverage from those references.
In a search for "norman rockwell" "freedom of speech" "four freedoms", Google Books comes up with over one-thousand-and-four-hundred (1,400) total results.
This article lists five (5) total references.
I'd imagine the article could be expanded with at least fifteen (15) or so more secondary sources, with more information to enlarge the scope and breadth of the article.
Both the amount of total references currently cited, and the size and scope and breadth of the article in its current state, just seems a bit skimpy.
Should be pretty easy to find more sources from that search suggested, above.
Cheers,
— Cirt ( talk) 18:14, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
Comment. A quote near the end includes "A great picture, I think is on e shich moves and inspires millions of people". I think there must be a typo, probably "one which" rather than "on e shich", but the reference is off-line so I won't just fix it myself. I think this is an open GA review and that this comment is helpful within that, but please let me know if this is not the correct place to make a comment like this. -- do ncr am 20:51, 30 December 2013 (UTC)
Hi Tony, Happy New Year!
Sorry to say, I couldn’t come up with much more on this. The WP article’s already using most of the substantive discussions out there – yes, it’s mentioned in passing, one or two sentences, in many many sources, but I agree that there isn’t much extra information in them. Here are some lesser ones.
Best wishes, Novickas ( talk) 16:11, 2 January 2014 (UTC)
Passed as GA quality.
Thanks for being so responsive to GA Reviewer comments, above.
GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (
|
visual edit |
history) ·
Article talk (
|
history) ·
Watch
Reviewer: Cirt ( talk · contribs) 18:01, 24 December 2013 (UTC)
The pull quote blue box might look a bit better aligned on the right side instead of the left. — Cirt ( talk) 05:05, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
Could a few more entries be added to other relevant articles in the See also sect? Right now it's got zero links but just the portal, which is a good link though. :) — Cirt ( talk) 05:05, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
I strongly suggest modifying entire article so it is all in one tense style for tense uniformity. I recommend using past tense, throughout the entire article, for ease of readability, flow, and comprehension for both readers and editors, alike. — Cirt ( talk) 05:05, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
Citation 2 is to this link http://www.amazon.com/Norman-Rockwells-Four-Freedoms-Inspire/dp/0936399422 which is to Amazon.com.
There are much better citations that could be used for this info, I'm not sure why a hyperlink to Amazon.com is being used here.
Please replace this cite with a better quality cite, to a secondary source that satisfies WP:RS and WP:V.
Thank you,
— Cirt ( talk) 05:10, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
Please spell out full date format for all cites so they have uniformity. Some use 2013-12-29, others use December 29, 2013. Please use the latter, throughout, thanks. — Cirt ( talk) 22:15, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
^ "Norman Rockwell in the 1940s: A View of the American Homefront". Norman Rockwell Museum. Retrieved 2008-04-12.[dead link]
This cite has a dead link, please fix, thank you.
While you're at it, please recheck and update accessdates for all cites that have hyperlinks.
— Cirt ( talk) 22:15, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
Jump up ^ "I Like To Please People". Time magazine. Time Inc. 1943-06-21. Retrieved 2008-04-12.
This cite could be fleshed out a bit more. Same issue with date format. Full title has word "Art" in front of title. Date should be given as June 21, 1943. http://content.time.com/time/magazine/article/0,9171,766759,00.html appears to be behind a paywall, I think there is a template to note that in the citation.
Please also double check all cites are formatted with WP:CIT templates for both standardization and uniformity. — Cirt ( talk) 22:15, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
I have a concern that not enough research has been done to cover the preponderance of secondary source references available to fully give the article breadth of coverage from those references.
In a search for "norman rockwell" "freedom of speech" "four freedoms", Google Books comes up with over one-thousand-and-four-hundred (1,400) total results.
This article lists five (5) total references.
I'd imagine the article could be expanded with at least fifteen (15) or so more secondary sources, with more information to enlarge the scope and breadth of the article.
Both the amount of total references currently cited, and the size and scope and breadth of the article in its current state, just seems a bit skimpy.
Should be pretty easy to find more sources from that search suggested, above.
Cheers,
— Cirt ( talk) 18:14, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
Comment. A quote near the end includes "A great picture, I think is on e shich moves and inspires millions of people". I think there must be a typo, probably "one which" rather than "on e shich", but the reference is off-line so I won't just fix it myself. I think this is an open GA review and that this comment is helpful within that, but please let me know if this is not the correct place to make a comment like this. -- do ncr am 20:51, 30 December 2013 (UTC)
Hi Tony, Happy New Year!
Sorry to say, I couldn’t come up with much more on this. The WP article’s already using most of the substantive discussions out there – yes, it’s mentioned in passing, one or two sentences, in many many sources, but I agree that there isn’t much extra information in them. Here are some lesser ones.
Best wishes, Novickas ( talk) 16:11, 2 January 2014 (UTC)
Passed as GA quality.
Thanks for being so responsive to GA Reviewer comments, above.