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![]() | Hello Doug Coldwell. After completing my preliminary copyedit I always ask questions about the article to ensure that my edit reflects the intended meaning and is clear in doing so. Please reply to each point by indenting below each one like you would a conversation; items will be struck out once they have been answered. Please ping me with {{ U}}, {{ ping}}, or {{ re}} as I have a lot of items on my watchlist. My copyediting process can be found here. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 03:26, 27 June 2020 (UTC) |
In 1870 he became a paid fireman in station No. #1.Emphasis added. "No." and "#" mean the same thing. Is the station house rendered as such in the source?
He slept at night at the fire station and worked at an outside trade during the day.I'm not educated on the subject, but is firefighting a trade?
Although the system needed updating and improvements [...]Updating and improvements go hand-in-hand. Would it be possible to replace "updating" with "maintenance"?
They wired fifteen miles in Akron to install new alarm boxes which used a telegraph key by the operator before realizing that the operator could not give the correct signal during the excitement of a fire."Excitement" doesn't seem to be the correct word to use. Can it be removed to just read during a fire?
Loomis then developed an alarm box that worked by turning a crank that automatically gave the correct signal. He patented an alarm box (#US323435A) which sends a signal when the lever is pulled.Edited already, but asking for confirmation: looking at the schematic on the right, does the alarm trigger when the door is opened?
It was first developed with a telegraph key, however soon improved with telephones built in.Were telephones installed later in the boxes or were the boxes completely replaced?
Loomis of E. York Street in Akron was the creator of this automobile.The sentence is sourced but I'm not sure of its relevance; the first sentence in the paragraph establishes the connection between the man and the vehicle.
The electric police patrol wagon was completely overhauled in 1913 to be exhibited.Slightly edited. Was it overhauled to be exhibited specifically for the 1915 International Expo?
In 1874, Loomis and another engineer developed and helped deploy four fire alarm telegraph signal boxes at key businesses in Akron.Is "helped" necessary? The closest source I'm reading in the paragraph doesn't go into detail about how he "helped deploy" the signal boxes.
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" implies that the person doing the helping isn't the primary actor; in the new clipping, Loomis says James Stanford, who was with [him] in the fire department, aided [him] in putting in four boxes in Akron.Loomis appears to be the one in charge of deploying the new boxes with Stanford aiding him. I still think "helped develop" can be changed to "developed", even if it gives Stanford a little more credit than the source reports. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 17:45, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
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Good work on this one. An interesting read about an interesting figure. Should be pretty simple to get most of these cleaned up.
Hog Farm
Bacon 01:13, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
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![]() | Frank Fowler Loomis was one of the Engineering and technology good articles, but it has been removed from the list. There are suggestions below for improving the article to meet the good article criteria. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake. | ||||||||||||
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![]() | A
fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's
Main Page in the "
Did you know?" column on
April 22, 2018. The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that
Frank Fowler Loomis designed and built the world's first motorized police
paddy wagon (pictured)? | ||||||||||||
Current status: Delisted good article |
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![]() | Hello Doug Coldwell. After completing my preliminary copyedit I always ask questions about the article to ensure that my edit reflects the intended meaning and is clear in doing so. Please reply to each point by indenting below each one like you would a conversation; items will be struck out once they have been answered. Please ping me with {{ U}}, {{ ping}}, or {{ re}} as I have a lot of items on my watchlist. My copyediting process can be found here. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 03:26, 27 June 2020 (UTC) |
In 1870 he became a paid fireman in station No. #1.Emphasis added. "No." and "#" mean the same thing. Is the station house rendered as such in the source?
He slept at night at the fire station and worked at an outside trade during the day.I'm not educated on the subject, but is firefighting a trade?
Although the system needed updating and improvements [...]Updating and improvements go hand-in-hand. Would it be possible to replace "updating" with "maintenance"?
They wired fifteen miles in Akron to install new alarm boxes which used a telegraph key by the operator before realizing that the operator could not give the correct signal during the excitement of a fire."Excitement" doesn't seem to be the correct word to use. Can it be removed to just read during a fire?
Loomis then developed an alarm box that worked by turning a crank that automatically gave the correct signal. He patented an alarm box (#US323435A) which sends a signal when the lever is pulled.Edited already, but asking for confirmation: looking at the schematic on the right, does the alarm trigger when the door is opened?
It was first developed with a telegraph key, however soon improved with telephones built in.Were telephones installed later in the boxes or were the boxes completely replaced?
Loomis of E. York Street in Akron was the creator of this automobile.The sentence is sourced but I'm not sure of its relevance; the first sentence in the paragraph establishes the connection between the man and the vehicle.
The electric police patrol wagon was completely overhauled in 1913 to be exhibited.Slightly edited. Was it overhauled to be exhibited specifically for the 1915 International Expo?
In 1874, Loomis and another engineer developed and helped deploy four fire alarm telegraph signal boxes at key businesses in Akron.Is "helped" necessary? The closest source I'm reading in the paragraph doesn't go into detail about how he "helped deploy" the signal boxes.
verb
" implies that the person doing the helping isn't the primary actor; in the new clipping, Loomis says James Stanford, who was with [him] in the fire department, aided [him] in putting in four boxes in Akron.Loomis appears to be the one in charge of deploying the new boxes with Stanford aiding him. I still think "helped develop" can be changed to "developed", even if it gives Stanford a little more credit than the source reports. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 17:45, 27 June 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Hog Farm ( talk · contribs) 02:59, 22 October 2020 (UTC)
Good work on this one. An interesting read about an interesting figure. Should be pretty simple to get most of these cleaned up.
Hog Farm
Bacon 01:13, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
This article is part of Wikipedia:Contributor copyright investigations/20210315 and the Good article (GA) drive to reassess and potentially delist over 200 GAs that might contain copyright and other problems. An AN discussion closed with consensus to delist this group of articles en masse, unless a reviewer opens an independent review and can vouch for/verify content of all sources. Please review Wikipedia:Good article reassessment/February 2023 for further information about the GA status of this article, the timeline and process for delisting, and suggestions for improvements. Questions or comments can be made at the project talk page. MediaWiki message delivery ( talk) 09:36, 9 February 2023 (UTC)