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Reviewer: Hog Farm ( talk · contribs) 14:45, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
Lead - The lead should be expanded, one sentence is too short for a GA. An expansion giving a sentence or two to each of: background of the conflict, with French colonization mentioned, an brief summary of the campaign, and a sentence about the aftermath would be nice.
Prelude - You talk about Pritchard expelling the Catholic missionaries, but the next citation after that is for the Morenhout, which supports the statement that Morenhout was consul but not Pritchard kicking people off the islands. It looks like that statement is probably supported by reference 8, which is after the one about the complaint being filed. A citation to wherever this information is found should be between the Pritchard eviction and the Morenhout reference, to make it clear where the information actually comes from.
There's a lot of redlinks in this article: Ships, battles, tribal leaders, and Morenhout the French consul. If these items are notable, then the redlinks should be retained to encourage article creation. If not, the wikilinks should be removed.
References - I'm not 100% sold on one of the sources. WP:SCHOLARSHIP talks about using theses as sources, and Newbury's doctorate thesis seems to pass muster, although I'm not sure Gonschor's master's thesis. "Masters dissertations and theses are considered reliable only if they can be shown to have had significant scholarly influence." - Does this thesis meet that requirement? It's cited 7 times in the article.
The images are both public domain, so they work. I'm not finding any COPYVIO either.
@ KAVEBEAR: Aside from a couple smaller things, there's only two large ones that need addressed - The brevity of the lead and the question of the reliability of Gonschor's thesis. Hog Farm ( talk) 15:27, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Hog Farm ( talk · contribs) 14:45, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
Lead - The lead should be expanded, one sentence is too short for a GA. An expansion giving a sentence or two to each of: background of the conflict, with French colonization mentioned, an brief summary of the campaign, and a sentence about the aftermath would be nice.
Prelude - You talk about Pritchard expelling the Catholic missionaries, but the next citation after that is for the Morenhout, which supports the statement that Morenhout was consul but not Pritchard kicking people off the islands. It looks like that statement is probably supported by reference 8, which is after the one about the complaint being filed. A citation to wherever this information is found should be between the Pritchard eviction and the Morenhout reference, to make it clear where the information actually comes from.
There's a lot of redlinks in this article: Ships, battles, tribal leaders, and Morenhout the French consul. If these items are notable, then the redlinks should be retained to encourage article creation. If not, the wikilinks should be removed.
References - I'm not 100% sold on one of the sources. WP:SCHOLARSHIP talks about using theses as sources, and Newbury's doctorate thesis seems to pass muster, although I'm not sure Gonschor's master's thesis. "Masters dissertations and theses are considered reliable only if they can be shown to have had significant scholarly influence." - Does this thesis meet that requirement? It's cited 7 times in the article.
The images are both public domain, so they work. I'm not finding any COPYVIO either.
@ KAVEBEAR: Aside from a couple smaller things, there's only two large ones that need addressed - The brevity of the lead and the question of the reliability of Gonschor's thesis. Hog Farm ( talk) 15:27, 17 February 2020 (UTC)