The lead could be expanded a little in order to summarize the article better. A few mentions of her recognition and work would make it comply per
WP:LEAD
"She grew up in the well-to-do 17th arrondissement of Paris." - what does this mean??
It's supposed to express that she grew up in a relatively wealthy part of Paris. Does that not get across? Or is it "arrondisement" that's causing the problem? That appears to be the word that's used in English as well, but I'd welcome a clearer way to word it.
Curly Turkey¡gobble!23:57, 9 February 2015 (UTC)reply
"The French government made him a Knight of the Legion of Honour" - when was this? In her actual early life?
I'm surprised at how difficult it is to track this date down. There is no lack of sources that say he got it, but even the Legion of Honour's website doesn't seem to maintain a list (not one I can find, anyways).
Curly Turkey¡gobble!23:57, 9 February 2015 (UTC)reply
"The events led to Mouly's mother and sisters fleeing Paris" - her mother's sisters or her sisters?
In some instances in the Raw Books section, 'Raw' is both italicised and un-italicised. Which should it be?
When Raw refers to the magazine, it is italicized; when Raw refers to the compnay, it's not. To make it clearer, I've changed the unitalicized instances to "Raw Books".
Curly Turkey¡gobble!23:57, 9 February 2015 (UTC)reply
"It was not without its critics, who charged it with being highbrow and elitist" - criticism, and who were the critics?
Not a bad article, I like it. The only problems I could find with it are a few prose issues and the lead section is lacking content, but other than that it is pretty comprehensive and the references all check out. I'll leave this on hold for the standard seven days until they are all out of the way. Thanks! ☯Jaguar☯17:54, 9 February 2015 (UTC)reply
Close - promoted
Thank you for addressing them, I also learned a few things along the way too. The lead summarises the article well and the rest of the article is also well written, enough to make it meet the GA criteria. Well done ☯Jaguar☯14:36, 10 February 2015 (UTC)reply
The lead could be expanded a little in order to summarize the article better. A few mentions of her recognition and work would make it comply per
WP:LEAD
"She grew up in the well-to-do 17th arrondissement of Paris." - what does this mean??
It's supposed to express that she grew up in a relatively wealthy part of Paris. Does that not get across? Or is it "arrondisement" that's causing the problem? That appears to be the word that's used in English as well, but I'd welcome a clearer way to word it.
Curly Turkey¡gobble!23:57, 9 February 2015 (UTC)reply
"The French government made him a Knight of the Legion of Honour" - when was this? In her actual early life?
I'm surprised at how difficult it is to track this date down. There is no lack of sources that say he got it, but even the Legion of Honour's website doesn't seem to maintain a list (not one I can find, anyways).
Curly Turkey¡gobble!23:57, 9 February 2015 (UTC)reply
"The events led to Mouly's mother and sisters fleeing Paris" - her mother's sisters or her sisters?
In some instances in the Raw Books section, 'Raw' is both italicised and un-italicised. Which should it be?
When Raw refers to the magazine, it is italicized; when Raw refers to the compnay, it's not. To make it clearer, I've changed the unitalicized instances to "Raw Books".
Curly Turkey¡gobble!23:57, 9 February 2015 (UTC)reply
"It was not without its critics, who charged it with being highbrow and elitist" - criticism, and who were the critics?
Not a bad article, I like it. The only problems I could find with it are a few prose issues and the lead section is lacking content, but other than that it is pretty comprehensive and the references all check out. I'll leave this on hold for the standard seven days until they are all out of the way. Thanks! ☯Jaguar☯17:54, 9 February 2015 (UTC)reply
Close - promoted
Thank you for addressing them, I also learned a few things along the way too. The lead summarises the article well and the rest of the article is also well written, enough to make it meet the GA criteria. Well done ☯Jaguar☯14:36, 10 February 2015 (UTC)reply