A music sample can be beneficial to the reader's understanding. If you can upload or ask someone to upload one, it should be 16 second long.
Jivesh1205 (
Talk)
10:09, 2 January 2012 (UTC)reply
recorded by American recording artist Selena from her fifth studio album --> for
For consistency, add (1982) after "Back on the Chain Gang" or say the Pretenders' 1982 song
In the first paragraph, ""Fotos y recuerdos" has been used too closely. Please find alternatives.
that has influences --> contains - Make the correction in Music, theme and lyrics as well
is about a lonely women who --> is about a lonely women who,
on the Billboard Top Latin Songs Year-End Chart and number one --> on the Billboard Top Latin Songs Year-End Chart, and number one
music critics who believed --> music critics, who believed
while many agree --> Use past tense
With "Fotos y recuerdos" and thirteen other of Selena's top-ten singles in the Hot Latin Songs chart she was named "top Latin artist of the '90s" and "Best selling Latin artist of the decade" by Billboard --> With "Fotos y recuerdos" and thirteen other of Selena's top-ten singles in the Hot Latin Songs chart, she was named "Top Latin artist of the [19]90s" and "Best selling Latin artist of the decade" by Billboard magazine - Make the correction elsewhere if needed
Inspiration, production and songwriting controversy
While on tour for the Selena Live! Tour, --> Very choppy prose
Before recording sessions took place at Selena's father and manager Abraham Quintanilla Jr.'s recording studio Q-Productions, Quintanilla III had asked Selena if she wanted to record the song, she then supported the project. --> This sentence is a bit long in the sense that it illustrates many steps. You can cut it don into two sentences.
Lori Beth Rodriguez wrote in her book Mapping Tejana epistemologies: Contemporary (re)constructions of Tejana noted that "Fotos y recuerdos" --> Cut one of the verbs
"Such a romantic view on the part of a woman for a man is echoed in Borderlands songs like "Fotos y recuerdos," sung by Selena of Corpus Christi. The song tells how a lonely woman kisses the photo of her beloved each night before falling asleep."Jonayo!Selena 4 ever00:05, 5 January 2012 (UTC)reply
Young rockers could identify with ["Fotos y recuerdos",] which took the melody of the New Wave act [the Pretenders]". --> Read
WP:LQ and apply it here and everywhere else where necessary.
Create a section called Released and reception, then all this information. No need for such short individual sections.
"Fotos y recuerdos" was the fourth single from Amor prohibido and was released on February 11, 1995. --> "Fotos y recuerdos" was released as the fourth single from Amor prohibido on February 11, 1995.
El Chico del Apartamento 512 --> El Chico del Apartamento 512 (1995)\
on its eleven week --> on its eleventh charting week
Many music critics believe that "Fotos y recuerdos" is an "improvement" and/or a "better version" of the Pretenders' original version --> Apply past tense
in the United States --> in the US
Overuse of "Fotos y recuerdos"
believed that the song was one of Selena's signature songs --> it
Apply the corrections in the lead to the last sentence here.
I am unable to do this for the Hot Single Sales and the Latin 50 as there has not, yet, been one provided.
Note: Do you remember how you failed
this article for only a few issues that could have easily been handled? Frankly, it was unfair. I can fail "Fotos Y Recuerdos" right now based solely on that huge amount of choppy prose it contains. But I won't because I believe that these issues can be dealt with. Remember that you have to give nominators the chance to apply the corrections and not/NEVER fail an article straightaway (unless it is really horrible). This is a friendly advice. :D
Jivesh1205 (
Talk)
10:48, 2 January 2012 (UTC)reply
Note that you are supposed to use cite wen for Billboard unless you are sourcing your data from the physical magazine available at Google Books, then use cite journal.
A music sample can be beneficial to the reader's understanding. If you can upload or ask someone to upload one, it should be 16 second long.
Jivesh1205 (
Talk)
10:09, 2 January 2012 (UTC)reply
recorded by American recording artist Selena from her fifth studio album --> for
For consistency, add (1982) after "Back on the Chain Gang" or say the Pretenders' 1982 song
In the first paragraph, ""Fotos y recuerdos" has been used too closely. Please find alternatives.
that has influences --> contains - Make the correction in Music, theme and lyrics as well
is about a lonely women who --> is about a lonely women who,
on the Billboard Top Latin Songs Year-End Chart and number one --> on the Billboard Top Latin Songs Year-End Chart, and number one
music critics who believed --> music critics, who believed
while many agree --> Use past tense
With "Fotos y recuerdos" and thirteen other of Selena's top-ten singles in the Hot Latin Songs chart she was named "top Latin artist of the '90s" and "Best selling Latin artist of the decade" by Billboard --> With "Fotos y recuerdos" and thirteen other of Selena's top-ten singles in the Hot Latin Songs chart, she was named "Top Latin artist of the [19]90s" and "Best selling Latin artist of the decade" by Billboard magazine - Make the correction elsewhere if needed
Inspiration, production and songwriting controversy
While on tour for the Selena Live! Tour, --> Very choppy prose
Before recording sessions took place at Selena's father and manager Abraham Quintanilla Jr.'s recording studio Q-Productions, Quintanilla III had asked Selena if she wanted to record the song, she then supported the project. --> This sentence is a bit long in the sense that it illustrates many steps. You can cut it don into two sentences.
Lori Beth Rodriguez wrote in her book Mapping Tejana epistemologies: Contemporary (re)constructions of Tejana noted that "Fotos y recuerdos" --> Cut one of the verbs
"Such a romantic view on the part of a woman for a man is echoed in Borderlands songs like "Fotos y recuerdos," sung by Selena of Corpus Christi. The song tells how a lonely woman kisses the photo of her beloved each night before falling asleep."Jonayo!Selena 4 ever00:05, 5 January 2012 (UTC)reply
Young rockers could identify with ["Fotos y recuerdos",] which took the melody of the New Wave act [the Pretenders]". --> Read
WP:LQ and apply it here and everywhere else where necessary.
Create a section called Released and reception, then all this information. No need for such short individual sections.
"Fotos y recuerdos" was the fourth single from Amor prohibido and was released on February 11, 1995. --> "Fotos y recuerdos" was released as the fourth single from Amor prohibido on February 11, 1995.
El Chico del Apartamento 512 --> El Chico del Apartamento 512 (1995)\
on its eleven week --> on its eleventh charting week
Many music critics believe that "Fotos y recuerdos" is an "improvement" and/or a "better version" of the Pretenders' original version --> Apply past tense
in the United States --> in the US
Overuse of "Fotos y recuerdos"
believed that the song was one of Selena's signature songs --> it
Apply the corrections in the lead to the last sentence here.
I am unable to do this for the Hot Single Sales and the Latin 50 as there has not, yet, been one provided.
Note: Do you remember how you failed
this article for only a few issues that could have easily been handled? Frankly, it was unfair. I can fail "Fotos Y Recuerdos" right now based solely on that huge amount of choppy prose it contains. But I won't because I believe that these issues can be dealt with. Remember that you have to give nominators the chance to apply the corrections and not/NEVER fail an article straightaway (unless it is really horrible). This is a friendly advice. :D
Jivesh1205 (
Talk)
10:48, 2 January 2012 (UTC)reply
Note that you are supposed to use cite wen for Billboard unless you are sourcing your data from the physical magazine available at Google Books, then use cite journal.