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Reviewer: SusunW ( talk · contribs) 14:27, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
I'll take this one. Am looking forward to collaborating with you again. SusunW ( talk) 14:27, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
failing to show appropriate respect to a member of the publicis a direct quote from the source. Either attribute the quote and mark it as such or reword.
and could be lived incan you bundle the refs? I also note that I don't have access to Watt, but I don.t see 4-8 years in any of the links. It is verified in Holdsworth, however.
immediately went to court, but the article mentions no timeline and says "Bow County Court". I am assuming that is a court in Bow, London, but that is confusing because our article on Stratford, London says it is in Essex County and part of the Borough of Newham. To my unfamiliar eye, it looks as if the city was fiddling with the jurisdictions, but then I see in the Stratford article that it was originally in Bow. Perhaps you should link to Stratford, London? Unsure if naming the court will cause others to have the same confusion I did. On the time, I see the immediacy because Amayra says on 28 September 2014 that the council was studying ways to remove them, but by the time the BBC piece was written on 2 October, they had filed suit. Suggest you add a cite to the BBC piece.
argued they had been housed permanently instead of temporarily in the hostelis confusing. Seems like they are upset that they were provided permanent housing. Perhaps, "as their temporary placement had stretched on for three years", or something similar.
Saafan and her childrenand we don't know who that is. "She and her children" would be better.
children were evicted"in 2015"
wider familyand replace
the motherwith "Wood's mother".
empty East Ham police stationperhaps would be clearer by saying "the empty building which was formerly" the station?
emergency accommodationinsert "in 2014", which is implied in the source (18 mos prior to 2016) but stated outright in Hopps, which you might add as a citation to confirm date.
to Basildon in Essex
for 6 months
won the right to appeal
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That's it from me. Mostly nitpicky stuff on an interesting and well written article. Thank you for writing it and bringing it up to GA standard.
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Reviewer: SusunW ( talk · contribs) 14:27, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
I'll take this one. Am looking forward to collaborating with you again. SusunW ( talk) 14:27, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
failing to show appropriate respect to a member of the publicis a direct quote from the source. Either attribute the quote and mark it as such or reword.
and could be lived incan you bundle the refs? I also note that I don't have access to Watt, but I don.t see 4-8 years in any of the links. It is verified in Holdsworth, however.
immediately went to court, but the article mentions no timeline and says "Bow County Court". I am assuming that is a court in Bow, London, but that is confusing because our article on Stratford, London says it is in Essex County and part of the Borough of Newham. To my unfamiliar eye, it looks as if the city was fiddling with the jurisdictions, but then I see in the Stratford article that it was originally in Bow. Perhaps you should link to Stratford, London? Unsure if naming the court will cause others to have the same confusion I did. On the time, I see the immediacy because Amayra says on 28 September 2014 that the council was studying ways to remove them, but by the time the BBC piece was written on 2 October, they had filed suit. Suggest you add a cite to the BBC piece.
argued they had been housed permanently instead of temporarily in the hostelis confusing. Seems like they are upset that they were provided permanent housing. Perhaps, "as their temporary placement had stretched on for three years", or something similar.
Saafan and her childrenand we don't know who that is. "She and her children" would be better.
children were evicted"in 2015"
wider familyand replace
the motherwith "Wood's mother".
empty East Ham police stationperhaps would be clearer by saying "the empty building which was formerly" the station?
emergency accommodationinsert "in 2014", which is implied in the source (18 mos prior to 2016) but stated outright in Hopps, which you might add as a citation to confirm date.
to Basildon in Essex
for 6 months
won the right to appeal
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That's it from me. Mostly nitpicky stuff on an interesting and well written article. Thank you for writing it and bringing it up to GA standard.
SusunW (
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19:07, 23 October 2022 (UTC)