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Hi! I just finished reading this article and think that it is good overall, except for the plot section. While reading it I, personally, became very confused as to what was being discussed for a number of reasons. Firstly, there are a lot of proper nouns, which can be harder to digest than standard nouns, so if you can replace some of them it would probably make reading easier. Secondly, it seems to be in a "this happens... then this happens... then this happens" format which can be kind of... well, bland. If it could be rewritten so that it reads more like a storyline rather than a list that's just in paragraph form, that would probably be a good idea.
Otherwise, I think that this is ready to be a GA. Great work! I'm putting it on hold for now for further improvements. (Also, sorry if my concerns seem kind of confusing; it can be difficult to explain problems like this, and I don't know enough about the game to fix it myself... just let me know if you need clarification) – Drilnoth ( T • C) 16:03, 7 March 2009 (UTC)
I was wondering if another reviewer could take a look at the plot section... I'm really not all that familiar with what they should be like for a video game article, so I'd appreciate it if someone with a little more experience could take a look. Thanks! – Drilnoth ( T • C) 22:03, 16 March 2009 (UTC)
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Hi! I just finished reading this article and think that it is good overall, except for the plot section. While reading it I, personally, became very confused as to what was being discussed for a number of reasons. Firstly, there are a lot of proper nouns, which can be harder to digest than standard nouns, so if you can replace some of them it would probably make reading easier. Secondly, it seems to be in a "this happens... then this happens... then this happens" format which can be kind of... well, bland. If it could be rewritten so that it reads more like a storyline rather than a list that's just in paragraph form, that would probably be a good idea.
Otherwise, I think that this is ready to be a GA. Great work! I'm putting it on hold for now for further improvements. (Also, sorry if my concerns seem kind of confusing; it can be difficult to explain problems like this, and I don't know enough about the game to fix it myself... just let me know if you need clarification) – Drilnoth ( T • C) 16:03, 7 March 2009 (UTC)
I was wondering if another reviewer could take a look at the plot section... I'm really not all that familiar with what they should be like for a video game article, so I'd appreciate it if someone with a little more experience could take a look. Thanks! – Drilnoth ( T • C) 22:03, 16 March 2009 (UTC)