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Reviewer: Catrìona ( talk · contribs) 08:21, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
I'll take a look at this article as well.
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were murdered by regular troops (not the SS) by May 1942Recommend alternate phrasing, and clarify that they were shot after surrender was accepted. Perhaps "... were shot by Wehrmacht (not SS) units after their surrender was accepted." The emphasis on not the SS comes across as slightly POV.
sporadic objections to the order were not fundamentalI think this could be clarified. By "fundamental" you mean "in principle", "principled", "humanitarian" or due to respect for the rule of law, but I'm not sure which.
believed in a victory for even longeris "even" necessary here?
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Reviewer: Catrìona ( talk · contribs) 08:21, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
I'll take a look at this article as well.
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22:41, 9 October 2018 (UTC)
were murdered by regular troops (not the SS) by May 1942Recommend alternate phrasing, and clarify that they were shot after surrender was accepted. Perhaps "... were shot by Wehrmacht (not SS) units after their surrender was accepted." The emphasis on not the SS comes across as slightly POV.
sporadic objections to the order were not fundamentalI think this could be clarified. By "fundamental" you mean "in principle", "principled", "humanitarian" or due to respect for the rule of law, but I'm not sure which.
believed in a victory for even longeris "even" necessary here?
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