Article ( | visual edit | history) · Article talk ( | history) · Watch

Reviewer: The Rambling Man ( talk · contribs) 17:19, 9 September 2019 (UTC) reply

Comments

• The opening sentence is a big 'un four run-on clauses, probably could split it at "first introduced...".

 Done

• "was continually portrayed" is "continually" needed?

 Done

• " Initially a one-episode guest star in the first season of Arrow, she went on to become a recurring character in season one" eh? I guess you mean after guest-starring in an early episode of season one, she went on to become a recurring character later in the season?

- Have reworded - does that read better? AutumnKing ( talk) 17:23, 11 September 2019 (UTC) reply

• "DLC pack," probably worth linking DLC.

 Done

• I think mostly we spell savvy with two v's.

 Done

• " guest star[3] but following a positive response from show lead Stephen Amell[4] and from Warner Brothers executive Peter Roth[5][6] as well as from journalists at preview screenings[7] her role was extended to recurring through out the show's first season.[8]" never keen in the intrusive positioning of these refs. I'm certain our readers would be prepared to wait for the end of the sentence before finding the RS.

 Done

• " until...the " check ellipsis spacing per WP:ELLIPSIS (I think a space on both sides is needed).

 Done

• Apply that to the prose as well as the quote box.

 Done

• "seventh, and penultimate, season" you only just mentioned that season 8 was the ultimate season so I don't think you need both seventh and penultimate here.

 Done

• "without Rickards. [18]" no spaced between punc and ref.

 Done

• "Felicity Megan Smoak[19] is ... " similar comment relating to ref placement.

 Done

• "on July 24, 1989[21]" whether or not you keep the ref there, should be a comma after 1989.

 Done

• "Her early years are..." mega sentence.... split a bit!

 Done

• "Speaking after being made a series regular, Rickards commented" probably don't need "Speaking" here as she "comments..."

 Done

• "Comic-Con" is hyphenated in our article.

 Done

• Any reason why witness protection is capitalised (and not linked?)

 Done

Called away, back to complete soon. The Rambling Man ( Staying alive since 2005!) 11:56, 11 September 2019 (UTC) reply

• "of The A.V. Club " that's italicised according to our own article.

 Done

• "During season 2, when" two.

 Done

• "Speaking in 2014, executive" avoid single-sentence paras.

 Done

• "The season 4 premiere..." four.

 Done

• "Science, Technology, Engineering and Mathematics" we put a comma after Engineering normally.

 Done

• " loss of QC at" what is that?

 Done

• A few more "Talking ... noted" and "Speaking .. noted" in there.

 Done

• " men".[66]During " space after ref.

 Done

• "the AV Club saw" you called it "The A.V. Club" (not italics) earlier, and already linked it. Be consistent.

 Done

• "representations of women in STEM" no need to relink STEM. Also, for multiple references like that, consider including them all in a bullet pointed list under one ref to avoid the ugly "citekill" look.

 Done

• "majority of Arrow's run.[89][90][91][92][93][94][95] " similar.

 Done

• "In DC Comics canon" should that really be "In the DC Comics canon"?

 Done

• "Oliver-Felicity" probably ought to be en-dash.

 Done

• "critics.[103][46][104][105] " could do the same thing with these refs, but if not, please make them numerical order.

 Done

• " event Crisis on Earth-X, the" this event is shown in quotes in the target articles.

 Done

• Seems to be some unnecessary whitespace between para 1 and 2 of the Family section.

 Done

• "father, Noah Kuttler (Tom Amandes). also" probably should be a comma, not a full stop.

 Done

• "she later gives birth to Oliver and her daughter, Mia" reads really odd, do you mean she gave birth to her and Oliver's baby, Mia?

- Reworded, hopefully reads better. AutumnKing ( talk) 19:33, 11 September 2019 (UTC) reply

• "Going Rouge" rouge or rogue?!

 Done

• "Felicity and Earth- 2 Laurel's" what is "Earth- 2 Laurel"?? I think this person should be introduced here, rather than a few sections further down...

- Added background. Do you think it is sufficient? AutumnKing ( talk) 19:33, 11 September 2019 (UTC) reply

• "mid season" I would hyphenate this.

 Done

• Another single-sentence para at the end of Costume section.

- Expanded paragraph. AutumnKing ( talk) 14:38, 13 September 2019 (UTC) reply

• Do you think there's a real justification for the use of two non-free images of Smoak? I'm not convinced that the second brings more to the party than the first...

 Removed

• "his identity.[22]Following" space after ref.

 Done

• "for A.R.G.U.S..[176] " remove the last full stop.

 Done

• A lot of relinking of the season articles, I'm not completely unhappy with it because they're all in the Storyline section and perhaps a way after the first links, but just thought I'd mention it.

- Have left in for reasons you mention. AutumnKing ( talk) 19:33, 11 September 2019 (UTC) reply

• "from an A.R.G.U.S. prison." having said that, no need to link A.R.G.U.S. again.

 Done

• The Flash section has a couple of single-sentence paras.

 Done

• " "Crisis on Earth X"," already linked but previously as "... Earth-X".

 Done

• " become...you " ellipsis comment applies.

 Done

• "'fan favorite'[224][225][51][226][227][31] or 'breakout' character,[228][229][230][231] " I'd really like those refs either in numerical order or bulleted so we only have one source number in line... Several examples of this in the early "Critical response" sections.

 Done

• IGN be consistent across the prose and refs, italics or not?

 Done

• "three episode The Secret Origin of Felicity Smoak for Digital Spy" aren't episode titles normally in quote marks?

 Done

That's enough for a first quick scan. I'll put the nomination on hold while we go through these initial comments. The Rambling Man ( Staying alive since 2005!) 14:41, 11 September 2019 (UTC) reply

Done everything as asked, just a couple of queries regarding rewording. Let me know if you think there is any more work to do. Many thanks. AutumnKing ( talk) 19:33, 11 September 2019 (UTC) reply

Sorry, quick additional question, would you say that the length/level of detail in the article is an issue at all ? Many thanks. AutumnKing ( talk) 20:13, 11 September 2019 (UTC) reply

It is very detailed. But I would say that if you were considering heading to FAC then this would be fine. I'll make another pass over the article later. The Rambling Man ( Staying alive since 2005!) 07:55, 12 September 2019 (UTC) reply

Okay, I had a review of the above items and the general status of the article now and I'm happy that it meets the GA criteria. Great work. The Rambling Man ( Staying alive since 2005!) 10:07, 14 September 2019 (UTC) reply