After thoroughly reading this article, I have decided to put this article on hold. I generally have seven days to allow you to fix the mistakes I have written or debate the ones you don't believe affect good article status, unless you state that you need more time to fix the issues or you are busy at the moment. Here are the main issues that are keeping this article from good article status:
Prose quality: The prose quality needs some work. With all of the mistakes listed below, it is affecting how the article flows and the quality of the article itself.
Citation of reliable sources where necessary: There are many times in the article where details do not have sources to back up the information listed.
"...lead single from the hip hop duo Bad Meets Evil..." - Remove "the" to make sentence flow better
"...composed of Royce da 5'9" and Eminem..." - Put "by" instead of "of"; composition should be separate sentence
The group is composed of Royce and Eminem. I reworded it to "...a group composed of". I was not talking about the song. I fixed that to avoid confusion.
WIKIPEDIANPENGUIN(
♫♫)22:20, 11 July 2011 (UTC)reply
"The song was released May 3, 2011." - State what record company released it; Put release in "Background" section as well and then it won't need citation in lead
"The single was produced by Eminem, Supa Dups,[3] and Jason "JG" Gilbert.[4]" - Put producers in "Background" section as well and then it won't need citation in lead
"Texas rapper Chamillionaire released a remix of this song on May 8, 2011.[5]" - Does not need citation because it is already in "Remixes" section
"A music video was shot in mid-May..." - Specify what year
"...by director James Larese of Syndrome." - Briefly specify what "Syndrome" is
"They music video features..." - Change "They" to "The"
"Fans and critics considered it a return to Eminem's 'Slim Shady' alter ego.[6]" - Does not need citation if cited in "Critical reception" section
"The lyrics were also very well received." - Not necessary in "Lead" section
"...with American record producer and D12 rapper Mr. Porter.[9]" - Citation not necessary in lead
"The music video began shooting on May 13, 2011 in Southwestern Detroit[17]..." - Should standalone as one sentence
"...and was directed by James Larese of collective group Syndrome,[18] a group that also directed videos for two other Eminem songs: "3 a.m." and "Crack a Bottle"." - Should standalone as one sentence; put reference 18 at end; needs source at end to verify other videos he directed
"...which shows the part of the video during the first time the chorus plays, confirming Sly Jordan's appearance in the video and the use of cartoon animation. - Needs reference
This is not required for GA status, but using
Template:Singlechart can help organize this section better
I don't feel this is absolutely necessary at this point. I am afraid that the template will ruin the references, which may not work or cite the chart positions appropriately.
WIKIPEDIANPENGUIN(
♫♫)22:35, 11 July 2011 (UTC)reply
Since all of the issues have been addressed, I feel confident passing this article to good article status. Good work and keep expanding the article with more information. -
Rp0211(talk2me)02:06, 12 July 2011 (UTC)reply
After thoroughly reading this article, I have decided to put this article on hold. I generally have seven days to allow you to fix the mistakes I have written or debate the ones you don't believe affect good article status, unless you state that you need more time to fix the issues or you are busy at the moment. Here are the main issues that are keeping this article from good article status:
Prose quality: The prose quality needs some work. With all of the mistakes listed below, it is affecting how the article flows and the quality of the article itself.
Citation of reliable sources where necessary: There are many times in the article where details do not have sources to back up the information listed.
"...lead single from the hip hop duo Bad Meets Evil..." - Remove "the" to make sentence flow better
"...composed of Royce da 5'9" and Eminem..." - Put "by" instead of "of"; composition should be separate sentence
The group is composed of Royce and Eminem. I reworded it to "...a group composed of". I was not talking about the song. I fixed that to avoid confusion.
WIKIPEDIANPENGUIN(
♫♫)22:20, 11 July 2011 (UTC)reply
"The song was released May 3, 2011." - State what record company released it; Put release in "Background" section as well and then it won't need citation in lead
"The single was produced by Eminem, Supa Dups,[3] and Jason "JG" Gilbert.[4]" - Put producers in "Background" section as well and then it won't need citation in lead
"Texas rapper Chamillionaire released a remix of this song on May 8, 2011.[5]" - Does not need citation because it is already in "Remixes" section
"A music video was shot in mid-May..." - Specify what year
"...by director James Larese of Syndrome." - Briefly specify what "Syndrome" is
"They music video features..." - Change "They" to "The"
"Fans and critics considered it a return to Eminem's 'Slim Shady' alter ego.[6]" - Does not need citation if cited in "Critical reception" section
"The lyrics were also very well received." - Not necessary in "Lead" section
"...with American record producer and D12 rapper Mr. Porter.[9]" - Citation not necessary in lead
"The music video began shooting on May 13, 2011 in Southwestern Detroit[17]..." - Should standalone as one sentence
"...and was directed by James Larese of collective group Syndrome,[18] a group that also directed videos for two other Eminem songs: "3 a.m." and "Crack a Bottle"." - Should standalone as one sentence; put reference 18 at end; needs source at end to verify other videos he directed
"...which shows the part of the video during the first time the chorus plays, confirming Sly Jordan's appearance in the video and the use of cartoon animation. - Needs reference
This is not required for GA status, but using
Template:Singlechart can help organize this section better
I don't feel this is absolutely necessary at this point. I am afraid that the template will ruin the references, which may not work or cite the chart positions appropriately.
WIKIPEDIANPENGUIN(
♫♫)22:35, 11 July 2011 (UTC)reply
Since all of the issues have been addressed, I feel confident passing this article to good article status. Good work and keep expanding the article with more information. -
Rp0211(talk2me)02:06, 12 July 2011 (UTC)reply