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The novel evolved as it was published. Fasana-e-Azad satirizes urban life for about its first 500 pages, usually centering on a wandering figure such as Azad or a minor character.[5] This was in keeping with the influence of Charles Dickens's The Pickwick Papers and Miguel de Cervantes' Don Quixote on Sarshar.[6] As the story progressed and became popular, he decided to serialize the narrative from 1878 to 1883.[5]. Is it referring to the Zarafat series or to Fasana-e-Azad? Mentioning the "500 pages" makes it sound like this paragraph is about the book Fasana-e-Azad, but then the dates given for after the story progressed and became popular start with the year the novel began -- surely only Zarafat could have had a chance to become popular before 1878? If this is information about Zarafat I'd suggest clarifying it; if it's about Fasana-e-Azad, I'd suggest either deleting it or moving it to other parts of the article.
It is an encyclopedia of contemporary Lucknow culture" feels out of place in what is otherwise a really specific and well-supported reception section. This work is not literally an encyclopedia so the source doesn't support the statement as-is. If we want to say it's like a encyclopedia that comparison should be attributed to somebody. Maybe this can be adapted to become the first sentence of the next paragraph.
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The novel evolved as it was published. Fasana-e-Azad satirizes urban life for about its first 500 pages, usually centering on a wandering figure such as Azad or a minor character.[5] This was in keeping with the influence of Charles Dickens's The Pickwick Papers and Miguel de Cervantes' Don Quixote on Sarshar.[6] As the story progressed and became popular, he decided to serialize the narrative from 1878 to 1883.[5]. Is it referring to the Zarafat series or to Fasana-e-Azad? Mentioning the "500 pages" makes it sound like this paragraph is about the book Fasana-e-Azad, but then the dates given for after the story progressed and became popular start with the year the novel began -- surely only Zarafat could have had a chance to become popular before 1878? If this is information about Zarafat I'd suggest clarifying it; if it's about Fasana-e-Azad, I'd suggest either deleting it or moving it to other parts of the article.
It is an encyclopedia of contemporary Lucknow culture" feels out of place in what is otherwise a really specific and well-supported reception section. This work is not literally an encyclopedia so the source doesn't support the statement as-is. If we want to say it's like a encyclopedia that comparison should be attributed to somebody. Maybe this can be adapted to become the first sentence of the next paragraph.