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Reviewer: Kaleeb18 ( talk · contribs) 14:17, 2 April 2022 (UTC)
Well this makes me so sad. I reviewed the entire article, and while I had another tab open that I was looking at I came back to this one and the page refreshed so now I must redo the entire review :( ― Kaleeb18 TalkCaleb 14:17, 2 April 2022 (UTC)
listening to the ocean waves in it– I would put ocean wave noises so it does not sound like there are ocean waves in the seashell
angrily scolds her for leaving, pointing out his scar– this sounds like the father is talking to the coyote
who acts much as she did– as much as?
research trip to Canon Beach.– I would add Canon Beach, Oregon.
Nourigat noted the abundance of raccoons in their natural habitat while on a research trip to Canon Beach. She immediately considered them as the short's main characters.– These two sentences can be combined
and story artist, respectively.– respectively is not needed
Disney's Meander drawing system– If Disney's Meander refers to meander (art), I think meander should link to that. But idk if it is referring to that since I have no clue what Disney's Meander is
simple accessory but ended– comma before but
released alongside theatrical screenings Encanto– of Encanto
received positive response– is it supposed to be responses? you could also maybe say a positive response
Romper stated it– should be a that after stated unless the quotation marks were just forgotten
considering it have some of– to have
Well, that's it for my review. This is just my two cents, but if your looking for a DYK hook you could create one based off how the raccoons were originally going to be humans, cause that was interesting. ― Kaleeb18 TalkCaleb 16:50, 2 April 2022 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Kaleeb18 ( talk · contribs) 14:17, 2 April 2022 (UTC)
Well this makes me so sad. I reviewed the entire article, and while I had another tab open that I was looking at I came back to this one and the page refreshed so now I must redo the entire review :( ― Kaleeb18 TalkCaleb 14:17, 2 April 2022 (UTC)
listening to the ocean waves in it– I would put ocean wave noises so it does not sound like there are ocean waves in the seashell
angrily scolds her for leaving, pointing out his scar– this sounds like the father is talking to the coyote
who acts much as she did– as much as?
research trip to Canon Beach.– I would add Canon Beach, Oregon.
Nourigat noted the abundance of raccoons in their natural habitat while on a research trip to Canon Beach. She immediately considered them as the short's main characters.– These two sentences can be combined
and story artist, respectively.– respectively is not needed
Disney's Meander drawing system– If Disney's Meander refers to meander (art), I think meander should link to that. But idk if it is referring to that since I have no clue what Disney's Meander is
simple accessory but ended– comma before but
released alongside theatrical screenings Encanto– of Encanto
received positive response– is it supposed to be responses? you could also maybe say a positive response
Romper stated it– should be a that after stated unless the quotation marks were just forgotten
considering it have some of– to have
Well, that's it for my review. This is just my two cents, but if your looking for a DYK hook you could create one based off how the raccoons were originally going to be humans, cause that was interesting. ― Kaleeb18 TalkCaleb 16:50, 2 April 2022 (UTC)
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