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This article had been replaced by an inappropriate redirect to Prostitute. I've revived most of the earlier text and added some refs, but it needs a thorough rewrite. LeadSongDog come howl! 18:38, 26 September 2011 (UTC)
The Theology section is clearly an opinion stated as fact. I have flagged it violating Wikipedia’s NPOV policies. The section should either modified to contain multiple viewpoints about the theological aspect of this archetype or deleted outright. 2605:6000:170E:BF:E005:2D:E43F:D40F ( talk) 02:15, 12 July 2016 (UTC)
Suggested edits: Quote: "It was a temptation based on desire, not sexual desire, but envy and a desire to be like God". Problem: choppy sentence. This sentence, although its meaning is clear, could be shortened to make it easier to read and thereby enhance the flow of the passage. Suggested edit:"It was a temptation based on the envy and desire to be like God".
Quote: "The term "fallen" was nevertheless most often conflated with sexual "knowledge" (i.e., experience), particularly for women at a time when the social value of their sexual integrity was insisted upon" Problem: use of passive voice, word choice. Suggested edit: "The term "fallen" was most often associated with sexual experience, which was seen as socially unacceptable and undesirable at the time."
Quote: "Rescue work among prostitutes was also part of the missionary work done by the Woman's Christian Temperance Union (WCTU), who also petitioned against alcohol and opium" Problem: grammar- the WTCU is a "what" not a "who" Suggested edit: change the "who" after "(WTCU)," to "which"
Potential Problem: The article is a quite Eurocentric. Except for a reference to the Philippine-American War and Arabic dancers, all evidence centers around Europe. Suggestion: Add examples from literature and art from places other than Europe, or add a subsection "the Concept of the Fallen Woman Around the World". For example, one could use the poem by Sor Juana Ines de la Cruz "Hombres necios que acusais". This will broaden the scope of the article and show that the concept of a fallen woman, or more broadly, the idea that women should not be sexual, exists everywhere. Mff2020 ( talk) 10:04, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
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I suggest adding a section about its contemporary usage in the Islamic World 208.64.158.251 ( talk) 00:36, 14 April 2022 (UTC)
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This article had been replaced by an inappropriate redirect to Prostitute. I've revived most of the earlier text and added some refs, but it needs a thorough rewrite. LeadSongDog come howl! 18:38, 26 September 2011 (UTC)
The Theology section is clearly an opinion stated as fact. I have flagged it violating Wikipedia’s NPOV policies. The section should either modified to contain multiple viewpoints about the theological aspect of this archetype or deleted outright. 2605:6000:170E:BF:E005:2D:E43F:D40F ( talk) 02:15, 12 July 2016 (UTC)
Suggested edits: Quote: "It was a temptation based on desire, not sexual desire, but envy and a desire to be like God". Problem: choppy sentence. This sentence, although its meaning is clear, could be shortened to make it easier to read and thereby enhance the flow of the passage. Suggested edit:"It was a temptation based on the envy and desire to be like God".
Quote: "The term "fallen" was nevertheless most often conflated with sexual "knowledge" (i.e., experience), particularly for women at a time when the social value of their sexual integrity was insisted upon" Problem: use of passive voice, word choice. Suggested edit: "The term "fallen" was most often associated with sexual experience, which was seen as socially unacceptable and undesirable at the time."
Quote: "Rescue work among prostitutes was also part of the missionary work done by the Woman's Christian Temperance Union (WCTU), who also petitioned against alcohol and opium" Problem: grammar- the WTCU is a "what" not a "who" Suggested edit: change the "who" after "(WTCU)," to "which"
Potential Problem: The article is a quite Eurocentric. Except for a reference to the Philippine-American War and Arabic dancers, all evidence centers around Europe. Suggestion: Add examples from literature and art from places other than Europe, or add a subsection "the Concept of the Fallen Woman Around the World". For example, one could use the poem by Sor Juana Ines de la Cruz "Hombres necios que acusais". This will broaden the scope of the article and show that the concept of a fallen woman, or more broadly, the idea that women should not be sexual, exists everywhere. Mff2020 ( talk) 10:04, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
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I suggest adding a section about its contemporary usage in the Islamic World 208.64.158.251 ( talk) 00:36, 14 April 2022 (UTC)