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Upon the creation of this page, I wrote in a comment tag: "I purposely did not add the stub tag to this article; more info could be added, but I believe it is generally complete. There's just not that much more known about the guy, apparently." to which Rigadoun responded: "There is a lot more on the Hungarian page, which I can't read unfortunately. Sources would be good too."
Eh, very good point. I totally missed that page. In that case, I guess there's some translation work ahead of me. I removed both our comments from the page; I suppose it is a stub, but I'll get around to fixing that soon-ish. Thanks for the heads up! Korossyl 22:18, 7 November 2006 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Madalibi ( talk · contribs) 05:35, 28 January 2014 (UTC)
I will review this article in the next few days. Madalibi ( talk) 05:35, 28 January 2014 (UTC)
The article is short and sweet. I have a few comments and questions below, but GA status seems near.
was Grand Prince of the Hungarians around 950. Do we know for how many years he was grand prince? Could we add a phrase like "for a few years"? And are historians certain that Taksony succeeded him in 955 after the Battle of Lechfeld? If so, could we write that Fajsz was Grand Prince from around 950 to 955? Or maybe "from around 950 to around 955, around the time of the Battle of Lechfeld"?
All information on him comes from the Byzantine Emperor Constantine VII Porphyrogenitus.It would be clearer if we specified that we got the information on Fajsz from Porphyrogenitus's book De Administrando Imperio rather than from the man himself.
No other contemporary source or later Hungarian chronicle preserved his name, suggesting that central authority within the Hungarian tribes' confederation had significantly diminished by the time his reign began.I don't understand how the fact that his name was not preserved suggests the crumbling of central authority. Could you elaborate a little bit?
In the period starting with Árpád's death...Why not "After Arpad's death"?
This time was marked more by the various tribes acting in concert for raids than with the tribes acting under a strong central authority.This sentence is a bit convoluted. You could change to something more active like, "Various tribes could act in concert for raids, but rarely obeyed a strong central authority as they had under Arpad."
...visitors at Constantinople...: visitors to Constantinople?
Gyula Kristo: the same name is spelled "Gyula Kristó" lower in the article.
...the Hungarians' catastrophic defeat in the battle of Lechfeld: it would help if you could specify who the Hungarians fought at this battle.
His name which was preserved in two forms...: Because this is a new section, you might want to say "Fajsz's name, which was preserved in two forms..." (not forgetting the comma after "name").
Gyula Kristó rejects this hypothesis: could you explain why Kristó rejects this hypothesis?
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Fajsz has been listed as one of the
History good articles under the
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please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can
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Upon the creation of this page, I wrote in a comment tag: "I purposely did not add the stub tag to this article; more info could be added, but I believe it is generally complete. There's just not that much more known about the guy, apparently." to which Rigadoun responded: "There is a lot more on the Hungarian page, which I can't read unfortunately. Sources would be good too."
Eh, very good point. I totally missed that page. In that case, I guess there's some translation work ahead of me. I removed both our comments from the page; I suppose it is a stub, but I'll get around to fixing that soon-ish. Thanks for the heads up! Korossyl 22:18, 7 November 2006 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Madalibi ( talk · contribs) 05:35, 28 January 2014 (UTC)
I will review this article in the next few days. Madalibi ( talk) 05:35, 28 January 2014 (UTC)
The article is short and sweet. I have a few comments and questions below, but GA status seems near.
was Grand Prince of the Hungarians around 950. Do we know for how many years he was grand prince? Could we add a phrase like "for a few years"? And are historians certain that Taksony succeeded him in 955 after the Battle of Lechfeld? If so, could we write that Fajsz was Grand Prince from around 950 to 955? Or maybe "from around 950 to around 955, around the time of the Battle of Lechfeld"?
All information on him comes from the Byzantine Emperor Constantine VII Porphyrogenitus.It would be clearer if we specified that we got the information on Fajsz from Porphyrogenitus's book De Administrando Imperio rather than from the man himself.
No other contemporary source or later Hungarian chronicle preserved his name, suggesting that central authority within the Hungarian tribes' confederation had significantly diminished by the time his reign began.I don't understand how the fact that his name was not preserved suggests the crumbling of central authority. Could you elaborate a little bit?
In the period starting with Árpád's death...Why not "After Arpad's death"?
This time was marked more by the various tribes acting in concert for raids than with the tribes acting under a strong central authority.This sentence is a bit convoluted. You could change to something more active like, "Various tribes could act in concert for raids, but rarely obeyed a strong central authority as they had under Arpad."
...visitors at Constantinople...: visitors to Constantinople?
Gyula Kristo: the same name is spelled "Gyula Kristó" lower in the article.
...the Hungarians' catastrophic defeat in the battle of Lechfeld: it would help if you could specify who the Hungarians fought at this battle.
His name which was preserved in two forms...: Because this is a new section, you might want to say "Fajsz's name, which was preserved in two forms..." (not forgetting the comma after "name").
Gyula Kristó rejects this hypothesis: could you explain why Kristó rejects this hypothesis?
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