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Reviewer: Mike Christie ( talk · contribs) 22:32, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
I'll review this.
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An Earwig run showed up some issues that led me to start with spotchecks:
I'm going to fail this nomination; every single spotcheck has problems. Before renominating, please go through the article and make sure there are no more problems like this. However, I would also suggest that you think about approaching the article differently. It looks as if what you've done is searched for sources, and for each source you found you've plucked out the relevant material and dropped it into the article at the appropriate place. The way the citations are set up tells me that's how it was done, with a cite every few words in many places. It's almost impossible to write good prose that way. I think if you read the sources and then write sections in your own words, using the sources to support what you write, it will be far more readable. I have to say I would have considered failing the article on prose if the spotcheck issues had not stopped me from going further; it's very fragmented. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 23:47, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Mike Christie ( talk · contribs) 22:32, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
I'll review this.
Mike Christie (
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22:32, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
An Earwig run showed up some issues that led me to start with spotchecks:
I'm going to fail this nomination; every single spotcheck has problems. Before renominating, please go through the article and make sure there are no more problems like this. However, I would also suggest that you think about approaching the article differently. It looks as if what you've done is searched for sources, and for each source you found you've plucked out the relevant material and dropped it into the article at the appropriate place. The way the citations are set up tells me that's how it was done, with a cite every few words in many places. It's almost impossible to write good prose that way. I think if you read the sources and then write sections in your own words, using the sources to support what you write, it will be far more readable. I have to say I would have considered failing the article on prose if the spotcheck issues had not stopped me from going further; it's very fragmented. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 23:47, 19 September 2022 (UTC)