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Reviewer: Dobbyelf62 ( talk · contribs) 19:44, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
Overall, this is a well written article, but it needs more references to back it up. The details surrounding the recording process and song structure are excellent. However, some sections read a bit like an essay, but that should only require changes in sentence structure. (This has since been fixed)
Provides the reader with an adequate amount of information. The final paragraph includes two consecutive sentences that start with the word "it".
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@ Daniel Case: Identify the person who called Steely Dan and asked them to contribute a song for "FM". Perhaps you could also explain why the band was tapped for that role.
Fine, but I'm just wondering if the Breithaupt reference at the end of the lyrics subsection serves as the citation for the second paragraph. That appears to be the case, as you quote him several times throughout. I just want to make sure that there isn't any individual research.
While the article is pretty complete, there are some additions you can make to really push it over the edge. Some articles, like 4 Minutes, Ain't it Fun, and Bad all have a Chart performance/Commercial success section that details when the song debuted on the charts, what position it entered at, and when it hit its peak. Dates for certifications are also encouraged if applicable. Also, it would help to have more references. Several of these have over 85 of them. Granted, you might not be able to find as many some of the examples I gave, but there should at least be a few more. It does help that some of your sources have been used several times throughout the article, so at least a large portion of the text can be verified.
For a minor improvement, see if you can insert a related photo or audio file. The articles I linked should provide you with a basic idea of what we're looking for.
I see your point about chart performance; I'll see what I can do about putting a section together although I am currently working on another article with a DYK placement hoped for in a couple of weeks. Daniel Case ( talk) 17:15, 1 May 2019 (UTC)
I have been able to add to your chart performance section with grafs on its Canadian and New Zealand success (although given the nature of the source the latter is somewhat less detailed). I don't think we ought to detail its chart performance in Australia or the UK because it did not make the Top 40 in those markets. If I could get detail on its Spanish chart arc, I would, since it made No. 1 there, but I don't think that's available. Daniel Case ( talk) 02:53, 14 May 2019 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Dobbyelf62 ( talk · contribs) 19:44, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
Overall, this is a well written article, but it needs more references to back it up. The details surrounding the recording process and song structure are excellent. However, some sections read a bit like an essay, but that should only require changes in sentence structure. (This has since been fixed)
Provides the reader with an adequate amount of information. The final paragraph includes two consecutive sentences that start with the word "it".
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
@ Daniel Case: Identify the person who called Steely Dan and asked them to contribute a song for "FM". Perhaps you could also explain why the band was tapped for that role.
Fine, but I'm just wondering if the Breithaupt reference at the end of the lyrics subsection serves as the citation for the second paragraph. That appears to be the case, as you quote him several times throughout. I just want to make sure that there isn't any individual research.
While the article is pretty complete, there are some additions you can make to really push it over the edge. Some articles, like 4 Minutes, Ain't it Fun, and Bad all have a Chart performance/Commercial success section that details when the song debuted on the charts, what position it entered at, and when it hit its peak. Dates for certifications are also encouraged if applicable. Also, it would help to have more references. Several of these have over 85 of them. Granted, you might not be able to find as many some of the examples I gave, but there should at least be a few more. It does help that some of your sources have been used several times throughout the article, so at least a large portion of the text can be verified.
For a minor improvement, see if you can insert a related photo or audio file. The articles I linked should provide you with a basic idea of what we're looking for.
I see your point about chart performance; I'll see what I can do about putting a section together although I am currently working on another article with a DYK placement hoped for in a couple of weeks. Daniel Case ( talk) 17:15, 1 May 2019 (UTC)
I have been able to add to your chart performance section with grafs on its Canadian and New Zealand success (although given the nature of the source the latter is somewhat less detailed). I don't think we ought to detail its chart performance in Australia or the UK because it did not make the Top 40 in those markets. If I could get detail on its Spanish chart arc, I would, since it made No. 1 there, but I don't think that's available. Daniel Case ( talk) 02:53, 14 May 2019 (UTC)