I'll be reviewing this article. It's probably one of the biggest articles I've ever seen in this project so I might take some time. Cheers.
Tintor2 (
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00:20, 20 November 2021 (UTC)reply
Let's start with the simplest section. The lead.
The lead suggests that there are many pilots but from what I recall is that the only other pilot besides Shinji was Rei Ayanami. Asuka was reintroduced in 2.0, right?
Since there are only three notable voice actors in such paragraph you could briefly say who are these actors voicing in a single sentence.
The second paragraph feels way too long. I would recommend splitting in "Tomoki Kyoda." and "The film, whi" since it goes from its production to its reception.
"UCC Coffee, in particular, had already collaborated with Gainax during the release of End of Evangelion, producing Evangelion character-themed cans; for the release of Evangelion: 1.0, three hundred thousand cases of coffee were put on the market, corresponding to about nine million can" Seems a bit offplace.
"On March 5, 2021, 1.0 was broadcast in its entirety on Prime Video Japan's YouTube channel" lacks italic on 1.0
Reception
Things seen really well. I would suggest avoiding wikilinks for countries. Kinda too common.
I'll be reviewing this article. It's probably one of the biggest articles I've ever seen in this project so I might take some time. Cheers.
Tintor2 (
talk)
00:20, 20 November 2021 (UTC)reply
Let's start with the simplest section. The lead.
The lead suggests that there are many pilots but from what I recall is that the only other pilot besides Shinji was Rei Ayanami. Asuka was reintroduced in 2.0, right?
Since there are only three notable voice actors in such paragraph you could briefly say who are these actors voicing in a single sentence.
The second paragraph feels way too long. I would recommend splitting in "Tomoki Kyoda." and "The film, whi" since it goes from its production to its reception.
"UCC Coffee, in particular, had already collaborated with Gainax during the release of End of Evangelion, producing Evangelion character-themed cans; for the release of Evangelion: 1.0, three hundred thousand cases of coffee were put on the market, corresponding to about nine million can" Seems a bit offplace.
"On March 5, 2021, 1.0 was broadcast in its entirety on Prime Video Japan's YouTube channel" lacks italic on 1.0
Reception
Things seen really well. I would suggest avoiding wikilinks for countries. Kinda too common.