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Nominator: Sims2aholic8 ( talk · contribs) 12:03, 11 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Ligaturama ( talk · contribs) 15:15, 13 May 2024 (UTC)
Hello, I'll pick this up for review. Hopefully a love of ABBA won't make me too biased.
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Generally excellent, just a few small notes.
which according to tradition would have made Luxembourg the presumptive host in 1974- I'd go with just "made Luxembourg the presumptive host". "Presumptive" already implies that they would be the host by default, so the "would have" just confuses it a little. This would be consistent with the article body.
completed in 1805 and originally built for the Prince Regent (who would later succeed to the British throne as George IV) as stables and a riding school for his personal use.- the bit in brackets is a bit irrelevant, I think it can be removed.
performed by Anne-Marie David, which, according to Eurovision tradition, made Luxembourg the presumptive host of the 1974 contest.- comma placement, either "Anne-Marie David which, according to Eurovision tradition, made..." or "Anne-Marie David which according to Eurovision tradition made..." The article lead uses the latter.
Awarding the contest to ITV would have effectively barred the BBC from participating, as only one broadcaster from a given country can participate in the event, resulting in the BBC submitting a counter-offer which the EBU subsequently accepted on 7 June 1973.I don't really understand what this means; why was it an issue that the BBC couldn't participate but it didn't matter if ITV couldn't? Also, I think you can remove the "subsequently".
Among the other venues...- paragraph probably belongs beneath the description of the Dome, rather than under subheading Host Selection.
Ultimately, however, only seventeen participating entries were performed- either remove "however" here as it was used in the previous sentence, or change the one in the previous sentence to "but".
in 1964, and 1969, respectively- these two commas aren't needed
artists were able to perform in any language, and not necessarily that of the country their represented.- "their" should be "they"
Rehearsals with the competing acts commenced the following day, with each participating act having a 50-minute slot on stage to perform through their entry with the orchestra; the first rehearsals for all countries were held over two days on 3 and 4 April and were conducted without their stage costumes.- you've already said rehearsals for acts started the following day (the 3rd) so I suggest condensing this information like "The first rehearsals with the competing acts for all countries were held over the succeeding two days, with each participating act having a 50-minute slot on stage to perform through their entry with the orchestra, but without their stage costumes."
The 1974 Eurovision Song Contest has retroactively gained notoriety for a number of aspects- is "notoriety" the right word here? Most of the section is how it was a launchpad for ABBA and Olivia Newton-John.
after starring in the film musicals Grease and Xanadu- Grease link should be to Grease (film)
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Israel was also some distance geographically from the core of Western European nations which participated in the event at this time, and IBA still lagged behind many European broadcasters from a technological perspective. Awarding the contest to ITV would have effectively barred the BBC from participating, as only one broadcaster from a given country can participate in the event, resulting in the BBC submitting a counter-offer which the EBU subsequently accepted on 7 June 1973.I assume this is to be supported by the citation at the end of the next paragraph, but it should be cited at the end of this paragraph too.
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Following the group's win, "Waterloo" went on to top the charts in multiple European countries, including the UK singles chart, as well as reaching the top ten in the Billboard Hot 100.References don't mention it getting to no. 1 in the UK singles chart.
As if to underline how out of touch it all was, four weeks later, Waterloo was the UK No 1, and we all know how things played out for Abba thereafter.Sims2aholic8 ( talk) 09:09, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
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Nominator: Sims2aholic8 ( talk · contribs) 12:03, 11 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Ligaturama ( talk · contribs) 15:15, 13 May 2024 (UTC)
Hello, I'll pick this up for review. Hopefully a love of ABBA won't make me too biased.
Ligaturama (
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Generally excellent, just a few small notes.
which according to tradition would have made Luxembourg the presumptive host in 1974- I'd go with just "made Luxembourg the presumptive host". "Presumptive" already implies that they would be the host by default, so the "would have" just confuses it a little. This would be consistent with the article body.
completed in 1805 and originally built for the Prince Regent (who would later succeed to the British throne as George IV) as stables and a riding school for his personal use.- the bit in brackets is a bit irrelevant, I think it can be removed.
performed by Anne-Marie David, which, according to Eurovision tradition, made Luxembourg the presumptive host of the 1974 contest.- comma placement, either "Anne-Marie David which, according to Eurovision tradition, made..." or "Anne-Marie David which according to Eurovision tradition made..." The article lead uses the latter.
Awarding the contest to ITV would have effectively barred the BBC from participating, as only one broadcaster from a given country can participate in the event, resulting in the BBC submitting a counter-offer which the EBU subsequently accepted on 7 June 1973.I don't really understand what this means; why was it an issue that the BBC couldn't participate but it didn't matter if ITV couldn't? Also, I think you can remove the "subsequently".
Among the other venues...- paragraph probably belongs beneath the description of the Dome, rather than under subheading Host Selection.
Ultimately, however, only seventeen participating entries were performed- either remove "however" here as it was used in the previous sentence, or change the one in the previous sentence to "but".
in 1964, and 1969, respectively- these two commas aren't needed
artists were able to perform in any language, and not necessarily that of the country their represented.- "their" should be "they"
Rehearsals with the competing acts commenced the following day, with each participating act having a 50-minute slot on stage to perform through their entry with the orchestra; the first rehearsals for all countries were held over two days on 3 and 4 April and were conducted without their stage costumes.- you've already said rehearsals for acts started the following day (the 3rd) so I suggest condensing this information like "The first rehearsals with the competing acts for all countries were held over the succeeding two days, with each participating act having a 50-minute slot on stage to perform through their entry with the orchestra, but without their stage costumes."
The 1974 Eurovision Song Contest has retroactively gained notoriety for a number of aspects- is "notoriety" the right word here? Most of the section is how it was a launchpad for ABBA and Olivia Newton-John.
after starring in the film musicals Grease and Xanadu- Grease link should be to Grease (film)
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Israel was also some distance geographically from the core of Western European nations which participated in the event at this time, and IBA still lagged behind many European broadcasters from a technological perspective. Awarding the contest to ITV would have effectively barred the BBC from participating, as only one broadcaster from a given country can participate in the event, resulting in the BBC submitting a counter-offer which the EBU subsequently accepted on 7 June 1973.I assume this is to be supported by the citation at the end of the next paragraph, but it should be cited at the end of this paragraph too.
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Numbers are from revision ID 1221565003
Following the group's win, "Waterloo" went on to top the charts in multiple European countries, including the UK singles chart, as well as reaching the top ten in the Billboard Hot 100.References don't mention it getting to no. 1 in the UK singles chart.
As if to underline how out of touch it all was, four weeks later, Waterloo was the UK No 1, and we all know how things played out for Abba thereafter.Sims2aholic8 ( talk) 09:09, 14 May 2024 (UTC)