Why is instrumental not capitalized here when it is in the track listing?
The genres are listed in the body as dance and pop hip hop; fix this here for consistency
Identify as her fifth studio album of the same name - What do you mean? the phrase is piped to the album
"but after it was leaked and" → "but after being leaked and"
"It was then included on" → "The song was included on" and move this to the second para before the covers and parodies - I think it's more appropriate to leave it where it's at, following the single's release, but if you think it's necessary to move it, just let me know where specifically 😅 do you mean after the sentences that mentions the performances before the covers?
Compilation albums are more related to legacy than release info, so it should be in those sentences before the covers. --
K. Peake19:14, 1 August 2022 (UTC)reply
""Erotica" continued Madonna's" → "The song continued Madonna's"
Are you sure the release year of "Justify My Love" should be in the lead?
"It's also been covered and" → "It has also been covered and" and mention any notable ones this includes
Done
Background and development
"performs "Erotica" as the" → "performing "Erotica" as the" on the img text, also this is missing a full-stop at the end and mention the four different versions in the text
Mention the ranking from The Tab and place it before NME for this reason too
"considered "Erotic", the version included on Sex," → "considered the Sex version of "Erotic""
Done
Commercial performance
The fifth place tie part is not consistent with what you have written in prose; please revise - Care to elaborate? The source [53] 1995 Billboard article mentions this tie
"debuted at number 13 on the" → "debuted at number 13 on the US"
"By October 31," → "By October 31, 1992," -1992 is already mentioned in the opening sentence; I think it's redundant to mention it again
I'm almost done; will get to the final corrections (sources) tomorrow or throughout the week. I just have some comments I've left that I hope you can clarify for me @
Kyle Peake:--
Christian (
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21:53, 1 August 2022 (UTC)reply
Chrishm21 Thank you for addressing most of my issues and I look forward to seeing the remainder of your response soon; I will leave my clarifications as follows. The fifth studio album intro in the lead is missing the word name after same, no refs should be invoked more than once in the same sentence to avoid
WP:OVERCITE, the dismissed part reads repetitively since you have used it on the most recent occasion, my problem with the img text is that it is not written out in prose and the previous sentence does not mention 1992 so you should add the year after October 31. --
K. Peake07:41, 2 August 2022 (UTC)reply
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Kyle Peake: I fixed the 'dismissed' bit (i think); also could you elaborate more on the prose subject? I'm not a native english speaker, so I'm not fully understanding 😅🙊--
Christian (
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21:08, 3 August 2022 (UTC)reply
Why is instrumental not capitalized here when it is in the track listing?
The genres are listed in the body as dance and pop hip hop; fix this here for consistency
Identify as her fifth studio album of the same name - What do you mean? the phrase is piped to the album
"but after it was leaked and" → "but after being leaked and"
"It was then included on" → "The song was included on" and move this to the second para before the covers and parodies - I think it's more appropriate to leave it where it's at, following the single's release, but if you think it's necessary to move it, just let me know where specifically 😅 do you mean after the sentences that mentions the performances before the covers?
Compilation albums are more related to legacy than release info, so it should be in those sentences before the covers. --
K. Peake19:14, 1 August 2022 (UTC)reply
""Erotica" continued Madonna's" → "The song continued Madonna's"
Are you sure the release year of "Justify My Love" should be in the lead?
"It's also been covered and" → "It has also been covered and" and mention any notable ones this includes
Done
Background and development
"performs "Erotica" as the" → "performing "Erotica" as the" on the img text, also this is missing a full-stop at the end and mention the four different versions in the text
Mention the ranking from The Tab and place it before NME for this reason too
"considered "Erotic", the version included on Sex," → "considered the Sex version of "Erotic""
Done
Commercial performance
The fifth place tie part is not consistent with what you have written in prose; please revise - Care to elaborate? The source [53] 1995 Billboard article mentions this tie
"debuted at number 13 on the" → "debuted at number 13 on the US"
"By October 31," → "By October 31, 1992," -1992 is already mentioned in the opening sentence; I think it's redundant to mention it again
I'm almost done; will get to the final corrections (sources) tomorrow or throughout the week. I just have some comments I've left that I hope you can clarify for me @
Kyle Peake:--
Christian (
talk)
21:53, 1 August 2022 (UTC)reply
Chrishm21 Thank you for addressing most of my issues and I look forward to seeing the remainder of your response soon; I will leave my clarifications as follows. The fifth studio album intro in the lead is missing the word name after same, no refs should be invoked more than once in the same sentence to avoid
WP:OVERCITE, the dismissed part reads repetitively since you have used it on the most recent occasion, my problem with the img text is that it is not written out in prose and the previous sentence does not mention 1992 so you should add the year after October 31. --
K. Peake07:41, 2 August 2022 (UTC)reply
@
Kyle Peake: I fixed the 'dismissed' bit (i think); also could you elaborate more on the prose subject? I'm not a native english speaker, so I'm not fully understanding 😅🙊--
Christian (
talk)
21:08, 3 August 2022 (UTC)reply